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Military Service in South Korea Men are responsible for military duty in South Korea. There are two types of duty, active duty or non-active duty. To determine whether to be qualified on active duty or not, men have to be checked up on their health status when they become an adult. Conscripts who don't qualify the criteria of health status can’t be on active duty even they want to be. Non-active conscripts should work for public/civil service for about 2 years which is few months longer than active duty. If conscripts have a professional skill, e.g. medicine, computer engineering, they can choose to finish their duty as an alternative service. But they should work for about 3 years which is longer than other duties. As far as I felt as a conscript who is currently serving the military, most of the conscripts do not want to take their military duty due to various reasons: Many people died and killed by enemy and accidents. It’s probably inevitable in the military. But the governments do not take their responsibility and avoid to pay proper compensation for victims. Conscripts get paid $200 per month, which is 20 times smaller than minimum wage. Time is important and especially twenties’ are more valuable in our life. The governments have to treat conscripts much better than now. We dedicate our life to protect our family and friends. We deserve better.

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Males are conscripted into the military in South Korea. There are two types of duty, combat duty and non-combat duty. In order to determine the duty we are assigned, all males of age undergo a health check. Conscripts who do not meet the minimum physical requirements cannot be on combat duty even if they want to. Non-combatants will work for the public/civil service for about 2 years, which is a few months longer than combat duty. If conscripts have a professional skill, e.g. medicine, computer engineering, they can choose to serve in other specialised vocations (Medical Officer?). But they have to serve for about 3 years, which is longer than in the other duties. 


In my experience as a conscript currently serving, most conscripts do not want to serve because of various reasons. Firstly, many servicemen have lost their lives, either in accidents or killed in action. Deaths are probably inevitable in the military. But the governments do not take up responsibility and avoid paying proper compensation to the victims'  families. Conscripts are paid $200 per month, which is 20 times less than the minimum wage. Time is important, especially in our twenties!


The government have to start treating conscripts better. We put down our lives to protect our family and friends. We deserve better.


Helped you change some of the words, made some adjustments to some sentences! Do have a read and good luck for your training! South Korea has a fine army! 

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Military Service in South Korea

Men are responsible for military duty in South Korea: Consider rephrasing this to --> Military service is compulsory for males in South Korea. There are two types of military service, active duty and non-active duty*. To determine whether or not men are qualified for active duty or not, their health status needs to be verified when they become adults. Conscripts who don't meet the necessary criteria can’t be enlisted for active duty even if they want (to) be. Non-active conscripts could/may offer their services in the public/civil sector for about 2 years, which is a few months longer than the time needed/requested for active duty. If conscripts have a professional skill, e.g. medicine, computer engineering, they can choose to finish their duty by providing an alternative service. However, they should work for about 3 years, which is longer than the time needed/requested for other duties.

My own point of view as a conscript who is currently serving the military, is that most of the conscripts do not want to undergo their military service due to various reasons: Many people have died or have been killed by the enemy or in accidents. It’s probably inevitable in the military** (You may want to consider rephrasing this to something like: Such casualties can never be predicted). But The governments, however, does not take/recognize its responsibility and avoids fully compensating the victims' families. Conscripts get paid $200 per month, which is 20 times less than the minimum wage. Time is important and precious/valuable***, and especially in our twenties’ are more valuable in our life.

The/Our government has to start treating conscripts much better. We risk our lives to protect our family and friends. We deserve better.

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* I am not familiary with the exact terminology, so I can't really say whether the terms "active duty" and "non-active duty" are correct.

** Something cannot be probable and inevitable :-)

*** Both precious and valuable can be used when we want to attribute such qualities to time. However, in this context, I would go with "precious" to emphasize it a bit more.

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