Diary 2017.27.05 A writing practices from textbook (some drills) Please and welcome to correct! Need
Please offer one or two comments or thoughts to support those following viewpoints
1, I don't think that the Joint College Entrance Examination should be abolished.
It might compel some students to spend much on studying and building up those subjects which they aren't good at, besides it can divide the students into two parts, one is who are in advanced of the whole subjects of the previous education anther is opposite from that.
2, The fourth nuclear power plant should not be constructed.
If we want to have a better environment to decent to our next generation(or offsprings?), we might better to have some other projects which could bring out less pollution and eco-friendly processing power generator to our world.
3, We should not eat exotic dishes (what!!?? I deny this practicing totally..., but I still have to do it...to back it up anyway)
As long as we won't throw up or get poison from it, we might fry some of them. However, we are all too careless to notice that the dishes' source or how do they cook it? This could lead you to have some exotic diseases that you can't bear with.
4, Cigarette smoking should be banned in public places.
The taste or the smell which gives off from the cigarette for those chain smokers might be like a charming scent in the air, but we are not smoking at all, so don't share it in public areas.
5, It is a good idea to offer a health club to the employee.
As your boss and everybody known, staffs are the most important and vital essence of a company, thus, to maintain the employees' health is a double-winning idea to benefit the employees and the company itself.
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5, It is a good idea to offer a gym membership to the employee.
As your boss and everybody knows, staffs (staff means a group of workers so it is already plural. But for the following verb, it is considered because it's a single group. I hope that makes sense!! ) is the most important and vital essence of a company, thus, to maintain the employees' health is a double-winning win-win solution that would benefit the employees and the company itself.
Great job! You wrote about a lot of tricky topics but I could still understand it all :)
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Diary 2017.27.05 A writing practices from textbook (some drills) Please and welcome to correct! Need
Please offer one or two comments or thoughts to support those following viewpoints1, I don't think that the Joint College Entrance Examination should be abolished.
It might compel some students to spend much on more time studying and building up those subjects which they aren't good at. Besides Additionally, it can divide the students into two parts groups, one is who are in advanced of the whole subjects of the previous education anther is opposite from that. (For this last part I would say something like this: an advanced group that has a strong grasp on the subjects they have studied and a second group that still has room for improvement.)
2, The A fourth nuclear power plant should not be constructed.
If we want to have a better environment to decent pass down to our the next generation(or offsprings?), we it might better to have some other projects which would bring about less pollution and be more of an eco-friendly source to generate power for our world.
3, We should not eat exotic dishes (what!!?? I deny this practicing totally (Me too! :) )..., but I still have to do it...to back it up anyway)
As long as we won't throw up get sick or get poisoned from it, we might try some of them. However, sometimes we are all too careless to notice that the dishes' source or how do they cook it. This could lead you to have give you some exotic diseases that you can't bear with wouldn't want to have to deal with.
4, Cigarette smoking should be banned in public places.
The taste or The smell which gives off given off by the cigarettes for those chain smokers might be like a charming scent in the air for chain smokers, but we are not smoking at all all smokers, so don't share it in public areas.
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