Writing a biography about my favorite singer.
Hello! I have written a biography about my favorite singer. Is for my English class so I want to know my mistakes. Thank you very much!
KIM NAM JOON [Rap Monster]
Kim Nam Joon, best known as RAP MONSTER, is a rapper, composer, producer and dancer. He was born on 12th September in 1994 in Ilsan, South Korea. He is the leader of the popular korean music group called BTS which won a lot of awards and who is currently nominated to the Billboard Awards 2017, the biggest music awards in the world.
He has been a very smart boy, with a 148 IQ, being in the TOP 1,3% with the best coalification in South Korea. Although he was very good at school, he didn’t know what to study in the future, or what profession to choose. Then is when he became interested in the world of rap.
Kim Nam Joon has liked music all his life and in 2007 his dream was become a rapper. He joined Big Hit, a music agency, in 2010. He was chosen as the first member of BTS, being the leader of the group, and in 2013 he debuted with 6 other members.
He has got a lot of reputation because of his talent at rapping, composing and producing music. Also, thanks of his hard work that he has done since 2013, he could collaborate with famous American rappers like Warren G or Wale.
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Writing a biography about my favorite singer.
Hello! I have written a biography about my favorite singer. Is for my English class so I want to know my mistakes. Thank you very much!KIM NAM JOON [Rap Monster]
Kim Nam Joon, best known as RAP MONSTER, is a rapper, composer, producer and dancer. He was born on 12th September in 1994 in Ilsan, South Korea. He is the leader of the popular korean music group called BTS which has won a lot of awards and who is currently nominated to for the Billboard Awards 2017, the biggest music awards in the world.
He has been is a very smart boy, with a 148 IQ, being in the TOP top 1,3% with the best coalification qualification in South Korea. Although he was very good at school, he didn’t know what to study in the future, or what which profession to choose. That Then is when he became interested in the world of rap.
Kim Nam Joon has liked music all his life and in 2007 his dream was become a rapper. He joined Big Hit, a music agency, in 2010. He was chosen as the first member of BTS, being the leader of the group, and in 2013 he debuted with 6 other members.
He has got a lot of a reputation because of for his talent at rapping, composing and producing music. Also, thanks of to his hard work that he has done since 2013, he could collaborate with famous American rappers like Warren G or Wale.
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