Corrections · 4
Corrections: Part 1
Could you correct me this for me, please?
Dear Sir or Madam,I am writing to complain about my experience which that* my family and I had from the 10th to the 17th of July at the Westfield Hotel in Brighton. I am afraid to say that the stay did not live up to our expectations.
First of all, according to the information on your website at the time of booking, the hotel had bar food in the evening. However, the kitchen and bar areas were being gone up torn down/demolished(?) and the hotel was now a B&B without any food except for breakfast. At that point, not only had did we need to gone out with my {better: the} kids, but it was also too late to find anywhere {better: any place, any restaurant} that was opened. This left us feeling extremely dissatisfied.
Secondly, when while we were sleeping, the builders started making a noises at 7:30 in the morning. My son who is only two years-old started crying and my daughter followed himsuit.** It was In my opinion, we could have been advised by the reception staff about this fact in order to be prepared for it.
*This is a restrictive clause (a specific event that helps define the intent of the sentence) so it needs "that".
**Followed suit=continued/repeated in the same manner
Corrections: Part 2
Thirdly, when we tried to have the breakfast, we found that the kitchen was not (yet) opened and just only cold food could be got had. For the same reason, we had to buy drinks and sandwiches for dinner at the supermarket because of the inavailability of evening snacks in the hotel. I tried strongly very hard to complain to someone, but I could not to find the manager.
Due
to all of these, we believe that we are owed an apology and that we
should receive some form of compensation. I look forward to hearing your
views on this matter.
Yours faithfully,
Hannah Jones
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