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In the bar chart we can see the statistics about places where Thechnological University students chose to live in 1990-2010.
The number of students preferring to stay on campus remained at the same level of about 50% during the whole period of the research. Meanwhile more and more students were choosing to live in a shared flat. The trend grown rapidly from 15% in 1990 to 23% in 2000 and 43% in 2010. On the contrary, the group of students who decided to stay with parents has declined noticeably from 35% to 27% and 5% in 1990, 2000 and 2010 years accordingly.
To sum up, in those years almost nobody chose to stay with their parents while a life in a shared flat has become a lot more desireable.
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Graph description
In the bar chart graph we can see the statistics about places where Thechnological University students chose to live in 1990-2010.The number of students preferring to stay on campus remained at the same level of about 50% during the whole period of the research. Meanwhile more and more students were choosing to live in a shared flat. The trend grown grew rapidly from 15% in 1990 to 23% in 2000 and to 43% in 2010. On the contrary, the group of students who decided to stay with parents has declined noticeably from 35% to 27% and to 5% in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010 years accordingly respectfully.
To sum up, in those years almost nobody chose to stay with their parents while a life in a shared flat has become a lot more desireable.
You did a really good job! There are some parts that aren't necessarily wrong but isn't the typical way people would write it. My version is below.
The bar graph shows statistics about where Technological University students chose to live between 1990 and 2010.
During the entire research period, the number of students who prefers to stay on campus remained at approximately 50%. Meanwhile, more students were choosing to live in a shared flat. The trend grew rapidly from 1990 to 2000 to 2010 by increasing from 15% to 23% to 43%. On the contrary, students who decided to stay with parents has declined noticeably. Starting at 35% in 1990 it dropped to 27% in 2000 and 5% in 2010.
In conclusion, sharing a flat became more ideal while living with parents became undesirable.
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