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Essay 1 Our food has been changed by technological advances. Some people think that is an improvement while others are worried that may be harmful. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions. It is an inescapable fact that the advanced technology has brought a multitude of benefits to the society, especially for the food production. However, some are against this statement and point out the opposite side. In this essay, I will discuss the pros and cons of the issue and give my personal opinion. Undoubtedly, technological advances have significantly enhanced the speed and amount of food productions. This, never happened before the industrial revolution more than a hundred years ago, has helped human beings to address food crisis that commonly took place during wars and in a harsh environment etc. For example, during the WWI, food factories supplied food to soldiers and civilians. As a result, more people lives were saved. On the other hand, the adverse effect that brought by this huge change also has bred some problems that we have never expected. For instance, factory food usually contain some unknown chemical ingredients which might harm our health. If people keep consuming these products for a long term, they might diminish our health and some diseases such as high cholesterol and high blood pressure might occur more often and rapidly. As a consequence, it will put a strain on our healthcare system and cause social instability. To sum up, consumers need to be educated to differentiate between green food products and toxic products and more stricter rules and regulations need to be set up in order to minimal the side effect of unhealthy food. On the other hand, food companies need to always put the priority on the safety of consumers above anything.

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Essay 1

Our food has been changed by technological advances. Some people think that is an improvement while others are worried that may be harmful. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.


It is an inescapable fact that the advanced technology has brought a multitude of benefits to the society, especially for the food production. However, some are against this statement and point out the opposite side. In this essay, I will discuss the pros and cons of the issue and give my personal opinion.

Undoubtedly, technological advances have significantly enhanced the speed and amount of food productions. This, never happened before the industrial revolution more than a hundred years ago, has helped human beings to address food crisis that commonly took place during wars and in a harsh environment etc. For example, during the WWI, food factories supplied food to soldiers and civilians. As a result, more people lives were saved.

On the other hand, the adverse effect that brought by this huge change also has bred some problems that we have never expected. For instance, factory food usually contain some unknown chemical ingredients which might harm our health. If people keep consuming these products for a long term, they might diminish their our health and some diseases such as high cholesterol and high blood pressure might occur more often and rapidly. As a consequence, it will put a strain on our healthcare system and cause social instability.

To sum up, consumers need to be educated to differentiate between green food products and toxic products and more stricter rules and regulations need to be laid down set up in order to minimize minimal the side effect of unhealthy food. On the other hand, food companies need to always put set the priority on for the safety of consumers above anything.
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"pros and cons" - is kind of slang. It will be much better to use "advantages and disadvantages"
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Thank you for your comment. How come you noticed this? I am a little bit surprise.
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If I were you, I would resend this entry, it is such a pity that nobody had corrected it. :(

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