practice outline (how to write it correctly?)

II. Body
A. She fails to be a traditional wife.
1. Expecting a passionless marriage and a submissive wife
2. Rejecting her like a worthless object
B. she is living in a male-dominated society
1. Calling Faith as “poor little Faith”
2. Being despised and disrespected by her husband.

III. Conclusion: Faith is the ultimate victim in Young Goodman Brown.

Hi, guys
after you read my outline, hope you can correct my grammar or mistakes thanks:)

Grammatically speaking, there are very few mistakes. It is a well written outline. However, if it is for academic purposes there are some ways in which you can make it stronger.

Another example for a thesis might be:

This research paper will strive to identify the leading factors which serve to portray Faith as a victim in "Young Goodman Brown". The victimaization of her character is a result of the stereotype of women, living in a male-dominated society, as well as other aspects of her life.

This thesis has the same message as yours, only there is a bit more vocabulary and it is constructed in a more advanced way. 

I don't know if that is what you are looking for.  The only other advice I have is to maybe be a little more specific with your paragraph topics.

But for an outline, you have done a good job.