Matchmaking

Mr.Wada is a young man who works for a big bank in Tokyo. He isn't that tall but he doesn't mind. Because he is a good looking relatively/relatively good looking man and is aware of it. He is twenty-six years old and as his parents think it's time for him to get married. His mother often recommends him to have try a matchmaking which means meeting someone who wants with the will to get married. Recently, since/Ever since his mother told him about it all she did was bug him about it.  finally very often he was sick and tired of it and he finally agreed to do it. Being pleased a lot/Overjoyed, his mother called her friends one after another to ask whether there was any good women or not. In the meantime, his boss suggested that he should try have a match making as well and gavegive him an envelope which had woman's picture and profile. Looking up to the boss, he accepted his suggestion without looking at the inside of the envelope.

ひさこさん！
作文であまり間違えなかったが、私はもっと自然に書いておいたんだ
金色の「He isn't that tall ~~」の文も正しくても、読んでる人にとって、何で背のことを述べたかな～っと考えるだろう。だって最初の文はわださんの仕事のことを説明しながら、急にわださんの外見を説明した。アメリカ人のreadersには「仕事と外見の関係はなんですか？」と考えるので仕事のことを説明してから、外見のことを述べる前、Transition を入れて方がいい^_^

例文：Mr. Wada is a young man who works for a big bank in Tokyo. He lives a pretty good life, makes good money but there is one problem. ＜－ここから、お母さんのmatchmakingのことを紹介した方がいい、それから、彼のappears のことを述べた方がいいだろう。この金色文のために、我々読んでる人は仕事のトッピクから新しいトピックまで通るようにある
His mom keeps nagging him about getting a wife. He's still young, handsome, kind of short ラララ

ところが、
^_^ Good writing! I just wanted you to notice that little part. I hope my explanation makes sense

じゃな！

Matchmaking

Mr.Wada is a young man who works for a big bank in Tokyo. He isn't that tall but he doesn't mind,  because he is relatively good looking  and aware is of it. He is twenty-six years old and, as his parents think it's time for him to get married, his mother often recommends to him to have a matchmaking, which means meeting someone with the desire to get married. Recently, since his mother told him about it very often, he became sick and tired of it and he finally agreed to do it. Being pleased a lot, his mother called her friends one after another to ask whether there was a good woman or not. In the meantime, his boss also suggested that he have a matchmaking and gave him an envelope which had a woman's picture and profile. Looking up to the boss, he accepted his suggestion without looking at the inside of the envelope.