29 - Computer and Internet
Computer and Internet are both the main tools used to make administrative activities regardless of business area or private area.
As the years rolled on, the people each more times relying on computerized systems. This revolutionary machine provides us features enough to accomplish whatever administrative activity. Since writing a simple letter to some friends until developing complex systems. The dependency of the internet is spreading our society quickly and sometimes facilities of using this one cause addiction and could be out of control.
The big thing for using computer and internet are the endless ways to learning about everything. These technologies can narrow differences of social position and you are able to dream and achieve your goals. Best regards.
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29 - Computer and Internet
Computer and Internet are both the main tools used to make administrative activities regardless of business area or private area.As the years rolled on, the people each more times people are progressively relying more on computerized systems. This revolutionary machine technology provides us enough features to accomplish whatever administrative activity. Since From writing a simple letter to some friends until to developing complex systems. The dependency of the internet Internet dependency is spreading throughout our society quickly and sometimes facilities of using this one could facilitate cause addiction and could be get out of control.
The big thing for The main advantage of using computers and the internet are is the endless ways we can to learning learn about everything [ or "anything"] . These technologies can narrow differences of in social positions and you are able to dream and achieve your goals. Best regards.
NOTE: In the penultimate (one before last sentence) you may reference concepts of "social stratification" and an increase in "social mobility" through new technologies - this may make it a little clearer to a native anglophone. Good text and boa sorte!!
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Hi Rogerio!
I hope this helps!
Kind regards,
Liz
29 - Computer and Internet I suggest a different title, something that reflects the value of computers and the Internet. Perhaps:
The importance of computers and the Internet
Computer and Internet are both the main tools used to make administrative activities regardless of business area or private area.
Computers and the Internet are the main tools used to perform administrative activities, both for business and private use.
As the years rolled on, the people each more times relying on computerized systems.
As the years roll by, people are relying more and more on computerized systems.
This revolutionary machine provides us enough features enough to accomplish whatever any administrative activity, Since from writing a simple letter to some friends, until to developing complex systems. The dependency of the Internet is spreading throughout our society quickly, and sometimes facilities of using this one causing addiction, which and could be get out of control.
The big thing for using computer and internet are the endless ways to learning about everything.
The great thing about using computers and the Internet is that it gives us endless ways to learn about anything.
These technologies can narrow differences of social position and you are able to dream and achieve your goals. Best regards.**
These technologies can help narrow differences between social status, allowing people to dream and achieve their goals.
**I wouldn't end a professional article with "best regards", this is more appropriate for a letter or message.
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