Effort 2
" can I play with you" I said to them. When they accepted it, I started to play. After that every day we had played volleyball. So they trained me volley ball. Little by little I had became the best player. Few month later, we organized a volleyball match with that guy's they had laughed to me. In the beginning of match when they saw me as a player, they were surprised. We defeated them hard. so they came to me and shaked my hand. They told to me " we are sorry ". It was the best moment of my life. It's the result of EFFORT.
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Effort 2
" can I play with you" I said to asked them. When they accepted it, I started to play. After that every day we had played (would play) volleyball. So they trained me to play volley ball. Little by little I had became the best player. A few months later, we organized a volleyball match with that the guys they that had laughed to at me. In At the beginning of the match, when they saw me as a player, they were surprised. We defeated them hard*, so they came up to me and shaked shook my hand. They told to me " we are sorry ". It was the best moment of my life. It was the result of EFFORT.* we don't tend to say 'defeat them hard' in English. To express the same idea, I would say something like - 'it was a very big defeat' or 'we won against them - itwad a strong defeat',
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