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A sample of IELTS report, could you please assess my writting? The table illustrates data about the percentage of money spent by domestic people on different purposes in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey in 2002. It is clear from the table that the percentage of consumer expenditure on food, drink and tobacco in Turkey was 32.14% which is higher than what spent in other countries for the same purpose. Also, Ireland was ranked as a second country to spend on food, drink, and tobacco with a percentage of 28.91% while Sweden came last. In addition, 9.00 of national consumer expenditure in Italy spent on clothing and footwear, and this percentage was higher than what spent on the other countries. Besides, Sweden had the lowest percentage spent for the same sake, but the percentage in Spain, Turkey and Ireland was relatively close at 6.51,6.63 and 6.43% respectively. The percentage of money spent on leisure and education was at the highest level in Turkey at 4.35, whereas Spain had the lowest percentage at 1.98%. Overall, the most common feature among all mentioned countries that the highest percentage of money spent was for food, drinks and tobacco whereas the lowest percentage was for leisure and education.

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A sample of IELTS report, could you please assess my writting?

The table illustrates data about the percentage of money spent by domestic people on different purposes in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey in 2002.

It is clear from the table that the percentage of consumer expenditure on food, drink and tobacco in Turkey was 32.14%, which is higher than what was spent in other countries for the same purpose. Also, Ireland was ranked as the second country in terms of spending on food, drink, and tobacco with a percentage of 28.91%, while Sweden came last.

In addition, 9.00 (what is the unit of measurement? %?) of national consumer expenditure in Italy was spent on clothing and footwear, and this percentage was higher than what spent in the other countries. Besides, Sweden had the lowest percentage spent for the same purpose, but the percentage in Spain, Turkey and Ireland was relatively close at 6.51,6.63 and 6.43% respectively.
The percentage of money spent on leisure and education was at the highest level in Turkey at 4.35, whereas Spain had the lowest percentage at 1.98%.

Overall, the most common feature among all mentioned countries that the highest percentage of money spent was for food, drinks and tobacco whereas the lowest percentage was for leisure and education.

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