An English article. Please help me to correct it. Thank you
In my opinion, being healthy is the key element to succeed in the life.
That is to say, if one can lead a healthy life, then he or she can do things better than if he or she is not healthy
Because people who suffer from many diseases cannot do some complex things, they may have to go to see the doctor and make a lot of effort to maintain their body. So such condition prevents them from doing things more quickly or more accurately than people who is free of disease.
People who are always busy working may do damage to their bodies because they do not take a rest properly and they suffer pressures both mentally and physically. keep the balance between healthy life and work can give people enough energy to work longer than people who are over-worked. So leading a healthy life is very important to succeed.
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An English article. Please help me to correct it. Thank you
In my opinion, being healthy is the key element to succeed in the life.That is to say ("that is to say" makes sense, but it would sound better if you said "what I am trying to say is,..."),
if one can lead a healthy life, then he or she can do things better than if he or she is not healthy does not lead a healthy life.
Because people who suffer from many diseases cannot do some complex things to cure themselves,
they may have to go to see the a doctor, and make a lot of effort to maintain their body fitness.
So Also, such condition having diseases prevents them people from doing things more quickly or more accurately than people (this is good, but it is better to use the word "those") who is are free of disease.
People who are always busy working may do damage to their bodies because they do not take a rest properly properly rest
and they (you can use this, but it is a little redundant using it) suffer pressures both mentally and physically.
keeping the balance between healthy life living and work working can give people enough energy to work
longer than people who are over-worked over work themselves.
So, leading a healthy life is very important (in order) to succeed.
*There was a lot to work with, so if I corrected something and you do not understand why I corrected it, ask me why I did it!
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Congratulations for your text, PengLi.
I didn't find any mistakes but I'm not so good for corrections yet x)
I'm looking for english partners and judging for your text we have almost the same level. So I think we can help each other. Let me a message with you are interested, ok? ^^
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