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Should people bank online? Discuss.
New technologies are here to stay. Long queues at the bank are a thing of the past. Nowadays, the development of new technologies and electronic devices such as mobile phones and tablets allow people to get into their bank account from their homes. But it wasn’t always like that, in the first stages, this technology was a permanent source of distrust by the general public, especially the elder.
However, as the security issues were resolved and the systems were improved, most of the people changed their minds, the idea of online banking was not considered such a daring endeavour anymore.
These last years, online banking has become part of our everyday life. It is not a risk-free activity but it is safe enough for most of the people.
Considering all these ideas I think people should bank online, the advantages overcome the disadvantages by far. A time will come when people won’t even remember that in the past you had to go to a bank to exchange currency or to cash a check.
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Is this short text ok? Thanks!
Should people bank online? Discuss.New technologies are here to stay. Long queues at the bank are a thing of the past. Nowadays, the development of new technologies and electronic devices such as mobile phones and tablets allow people to get into their bank account from their homes. But it wasn’t always like that. in the first stages At first, this technology was a permanent source of distrust by the general public, especially the elders (or say "especially older generations).
However, as the security issues were resolved and the systems were improved, most of the people changed their minds, and the idea of online banking was not considered such a daring endeavor anymore.
These last years (or say "Especially within the last few years,", online banking has become part of our everyday life. It is not a risk-free activity, but it is safe enough for most of the people.
Considering all these ideas, I think people should bank online because the advantages overcome the disadvantages by far. A time will come when people won’t even remember that in the past you had to go to a bank to exchange currency or to cash a check.
Very good! Muy bien! Your time in the UK benefited you a lot. Be aware of how I used the comma and the conjunctions. Commas allow the reader a slight pause before going on to the next idea. Your sentence structures are very good - and that is why the issues with the commas and conjunctions. Keep it up. Ven a EEUU y aprende un inglés mejor <je je je ... un poco chiste :-) >
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