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IELTS Essay: More money for The Art? IELTS Essay: More money for The Art? The Art should be better funded by the government but there must be more control over where the money goes. Discuss. Today there are a lot of sentences that people must do what they wish. Of course persons should be free in their desires. But they often substitute their malfunctions by the Art. Who can become an artist of a good composer? In my opinion to be a great art person is a hard work. Firstly you should be born with abilities to some type of art, and you need to sustain it throughout the life. Besides you should show results all time. Of course many people tries to find their place in our world by means of the Art, but who have to fund them? Who was Leonardo? First of all he was an engineer, also he had a permanent job. He had deserved the great glory and reach people asked him to draw their faces on the blankets. Who is artists today? In the most cases they are people with salary, they are employees in the government theaters and galleries. They cannot show the outcome or other benefits. It is not important. They are only workers. Sometimes I really surprised, when I see how our streets adorned. The stupid colors, silly mottos and other strange things. To my mind not only government should control over when the money goes, also citizens have to say how it will spend. Nowadays artist try to compel ordinary people to confess their thoughts. I totally disagree with that. Artists should feel how the society mood changes. That reason created misconception between artists and governments, when they give money to some modern performance. If the results were more clearly and understandable, the fund would be more generous. Of course I totally agree with government decision to control over where the money goes in the Art. Almost it is only waste money, in most cases authority should spend money on scientific or education.

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IELTS Essay: More money for The Art?

IELTS Essay: More money for The Art?

The Art should be better funded by the government but there must be more control over where the money goes. Discuss.

Today there are a lot of sentences that people must do what they wish. Of course, persons each individual should be free in their desires. But they often substitute wishful think about their malfunctions failures as an by the Art. Who can become an artist of a good composer? /* don't get it */

In my opinion to be a great artist person is a hard work. Firstly you should be born with abilities to some type of art, and you need to sustain it throughout the life. Besides, you should show results all time. Of course, many people try tries to find their place in our world by means of the Art, but who have to fund them? Who was Leonardo? First of all, he was an engineer, also and he had a permanent job. He had deserved the great glory and reach people asked him to draw their faces on the blankets.

Who is are artists today? In the most cases, they are people with salary, they are employees in the government theaters and galleries. They cannot show the outcome or other benefits. It is not important. They are only workers. Sometimes I really surprised, when I see how our streets adorned. The stupid colors, silly mottos and other strange things. To my mind not only government should control over when where the money goes, also citizens might have to say how it will spend. Nowadays an artist try tries to compel ordinary people to confess their thoughts. I totally disagree with that. Artists should feel how the society mood changes. That reason created misconception between artists and governments, when they give money to some modern performance. If the results were more clearly and understandable, the fund would be more generous.


Of course, I totally agree with government decision to control over where the money goes in the Art. Almost it is only waste money, in most cases, authority should spend money on scientific or education.

As I see it, the main topic isn't covered well, there is very quick transition between discussion and conclusion

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