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My essay writing exercise. Please correct it. Some people think it's good for kids to grow up in cities. Others think it is better for them in the countryside. Please describe two views and give your opinion. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Where is better for children to grow up, cities or countryside? Each one has different answers. Some think it's better for children to live in cities, while others prefer their children more to live in countryside. In my opinion, though there are several advantages of living in cities, I tends more to let my children live in countryside during his/her childhood. Regarding cities, these advantages are considered important for children. Firstly, there are good educations for children in cities. Children have more choices of schools to go. There are also many private training classes to attend to develop their hobbies of arts, sports, social skills etc. Secondly, in cities, there are many educational places to go, like museums, libraries, musical halls, and so on. By visiting them, children can learn related knowledge, broaden their views, and develop their understanding of beautiful things. At last, in cities, there are also many big malls and shopping centers, it's very convenient for them to go shopping, buy clothes, toys and books. Not like cities, living in the countryside is another life style. Here there are fresh air, clean river, mountains, pet animals, broad farmlands, and many many things that are never found in cities. Children can keep touching closely with nature. They can play and run in the land, eat the food made from the freshest corns, vegetables, and fruits. Their bodies are practiced to be very strong. In the countryside, children often live in a large family, with their grandparents, uncles, aunts, cousins. The relationships with them is precious. Such a chance is very rare for city families. Growing up in such a family, children are usually helpful, bright, generous and kind to others. Though both cities and countryside have many of their own advantages, I still prefer my children to live in the countryside. I wish he/she is healthy, good-tempered and grateful through the experience in countryside. Maybe it's because my childhood was in city too long.

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Hi, this looks like an IELTS essay topic. If you need help with IELTS tets preparation, please visit my teacher profile: https://www.italki.com/shannonstride Please find below my corrections for your introduction. 

Some people think it's good for kids to grow up in cities. Others think it is better for them in the countryside. Please describe two views and give your opinion.
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1) Where is better for children to grow up, cities or countryside? Each one has different answers. Some think it's better for children to live in cities, while others prefer their children more to live in countryside. In my opinion, though there are several advantages of living in cities, 2) I tends more to let my children live in countryside during his/her childhood.

1) It is considered informal to start an essay with a rhetorical question. Try this opening line: 

The question of whether city or countryside living offers a better childhood is debatable. 

2) The essay topic wants you to state your opinion, not your current living situation. Thus, I would rephrase this sentence: 

I tend to/I am more inclined to want my children to grow up in the countryside as I feel it offers a better childhood experience than cities are able to offer. 





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