What do you think about the independence of Catalonia?
Nowadays, this question is one of the most talked topies, especially for the possible consequences that this would imply. It Catalonia gets the independence , I really think it would be a disadvantage for all the citizens.
Along the history, our country has passed different stages of wars and conquests and everythig to join the separate states into one, because: union is strength.
Together we try to improve the situation of our country and the independence wouldn't be a good solution because it would attract an enormous imbalance economic and cultural. I mean, Spain would lost a lot of tourim, very important landmarks... but also Catalonia would leave harmed, because it wouldn't have the advantages of being in the European Union or it would lost commerce...
In conclusion, I hope that Catalonia doesn't get the independence because it's one of 17 autonomous community and we won't be the same without her.
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What do you think about the independence of Catalonia?
Nowadays, this question is one of the most talked about topics, especially for given/in light of the possible consequences that this would imply. It Catalonia gets its independence , I really think it would be a disadvantage for all the citizens.Along the Throughout its history, our country has passed different stages of wars and conquests and everythig* to join unite the separate states into one, because: union is strength. {extra punctuations not needed}
Together, we try to improve the situation of our country and the independence wouldn't be a good solution because it would attract an enormous imbalance economic and cultural imbalance. I mean**, Spain would lose a lot of tourism, and*** very important landmarks... but also Catalonia would leave be left harmed,**** because it wouldn't have the advantages of being in the European Union and it would lose commerce...
In conclusion, I hope that Catalonia doesn't get the independence because it's one of 17 autonomous community and we won't be the same without her.
*This "and everything" tends to be something that Spanish speakers add at the end of sentences, but it's not necessary, and is a tell-tale sign that someone is a native Spanish speaker.
**Very conversational tone; if it's an essay, it's better to say: "That is to say", "In other words".
***A comma isn't used when you just have two things, you need a minimum of three things.
****Unlike in Spanish, we don't need a comma before "because".0
What do you think about the independence of
Catalonia?
Nowadays, this question is one of the most debated topics, especially regarding the possible consequences that this would imply. If Catalonia gets independence, I really think it will be a disadvantage for all the citizens. Along the history, our country has passed different stages of wars and conquests to unite the separate states into one, because union is strength. Together, we try to improve the situation of our country and the independence will not be a good solution, because it will trigger an enormous economic and cultural imbalance. I mean, not only Spain's tourism industry will be irreparably damaged, but Catalonia also will be harmed. It will not be able to enjoy the benefits of being in the European Union; it will also make huge commercial loss. In conclusion, I hope that Catalonia won’t get independence because it's one of 17 autonomous communities in Spain and we won't be the same without it.
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What do you think about the independence of Catalonia?
Nowadays, this question is one of the most talked topies, especially for the possible consequences that this would imply. It Catalonia gets the independence , I really think it would be a disadvantage for all the citizens.Along the history Through history, our country has passed different stages of wars and conquests and everythig to join the separate states into one, because: union is strength.
Together we try to improve the situation of our country and the independence wouldn't be a good solution because it would attract an enormous economic and cultural imbalance. I mean, Spain would lost lose a lot of tourism, and very important landmarks... but also Catalonia would leave be harmed, because it wouldn't have the advantages of being in the European Union or it would lost lose commerce...
In conclusion, I hope that Catalonia doesn't get the independence because it's one of 17 autonomous community and we won't be the same without her.
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