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My in-laws came to the U.S
My mother-in-law, my* father-in-law, my sister-in-law and my niece came to my place in the U.S.They stayed for 14 days in the U.S. We went shopping at the Walmart, played at a park and having had lunch at some restaurants for during the first week. They were so excited, because they had never been to the U.S. When they found the fresh groceries at a grocery store, they said they were awesome. The fresh groceries were colorful. When they ate a hamburgers**, they said it was they were big. They were excited doing something in the U.S.
We went to New Orleans on the that weekend. We listened to Jazz music on the Bourbon Street and we ate oyster, shrimp, crawfish and gumbo at a restaurant in the French Quarter. These were so good. We had a great time.
After we came back to my city, we went shopping at the grocery store again for souvenirs. My mother-in-law bought a lot of chocolate at the Trader Joe's.
They was were supposed to get back to Japan on Wednesday, but their air plane was delayed. When they arrived at the transit airport, their air plane to Japan had already departed. They took re-booked*** their tickets again, but their fright flight was two days later. They spent two nights at a hotel around the airport.
When As I am writing this notebook, they are still flying. I hope they get back safely.
It sounds like it was a wonderful visit. I can imagine them looking at the fruits and vegetables in the grocery store, and staring at the huge American hamburgers (これが多くのアメリカ人が太っている理由です!) I love Trader Joe's. We don't have one in my town. New Orleans sounds like it was especially fun!
Just a few specific comments:
* When you list several people or things, it isn't necessary to repeat "my" each time.
** Because each of them had a hamburger, "hamburgers" should be plural.
*** "Re-book" - to "book" means to schedule or reserve, especially for a trip. So "re-book" meant they got new tickets.
I hope that when they got back to Japan, they weren't too exhausted.
My in-laws came to the U.S
My mother-in-law, my father-in-law, my sister-in-law and my niece came to my place in the U.S.They stayed 14 days in the U.S. We went shopping at the Walmart, played at a park and having had lunch at some a few restaurants for the first week. They were so excited because they had never been to the U.S. When they found the fresh groceries at a grocery store, they said they were awesome. The fresh groceries were colorful. When they ate a hamburger, they said it was big. They were excited about doing something things in the U.S.
We went to New Orleans for the weekend. We listened to Jazz music on the Bourbon Street; and we ate oysters, shrimp, crawfish and gumbo at a restaurant in the French Quarter. These were It was so good. We had a great time.
After we came back to my city, we went shopping at the grocery store again for souvenirs. My mother in law bought a lot of chocolate at the Trader Joe's.
They was were supposed to get back to japan on Wednesday, but their airplane was delayed. When they arrived at the transit airport, their airplane to Japan already departed. They took their tickets again ("They bought more tickets" might be a little more natural here [?]), but their fright flight was two days later. They spent two nights at a hotel around the airport.
When As I am writing this notebook, they are flying. I hope they get back safely.
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