Hey Marcos,

please find my correction below. My suggestion for future applications: don't write too long sentences. Also, write in the active voice (I succeeded rather than it was successful). Also, show that you really looked into the company when mentioning special skills (e.g. Italian) and decide whether it's necessary to mention it or if it's enough to have it in your CV.

Application letter. Is this correct? Thanks

When I was younger I lived in Germany and, therefore, have a good command of the German language. I can welcome the players, introduce them to the facilities, and explain... In addition, I speak Italian fluently.

I am an outgoing person who loves team work, friendly, with lots of motivation and willing to accept any challenge.
In 2009 I worked doing a volunteer job with refugees in Italy, I had to coordinate with five other workers the food supply to guarantee that the food arrived in time and in a continuous basis. Also I was part of the team who were in charge to raise money for the camp, which at the end resulted in a very succesful task.

I am an outgoing person who loves teamwork. I am friendly and very motivated and willing to accept (and overcome) any challenge. In 2009, I volunteered to work with refugees in Italy. With five colleagues, I coordinated (did you have to do it or did you actually do it?) the food supply, guaranteeing that the food arrives on time and on a continuous basis. I also succeeded in raising money for the camp.

I hope you consider my previous experience and qualifications for this position. You can find attached my contact information.

I hope you consider my previous experience and qualifications valuable for this position. Attached you can find my contact information.

Looking forward to hearing from you soon,

Kind regards,
Mark Smith