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Once my friends and i decided to go to camping for the weekend, so, we bought somethings to start our adventure.
It took us an hour to get there, as soon as we got we started to set our tents up, we were happy and having a good time the weather was perfect. After we finished we went to the lake but we realised it was too quieted for our liking and we wanted to listen to some music, so John brought the car near the lake when suddenly it started to rain really hard we all got in the car to wait for it to go off but the rain got harder and harder so we tried to move the car to go back to the camp but the car didn't move an inch, it had stuck in the mud so we ran to the camp and left the car there. It rained all night long, I had never slept in a tent it was horrible so uncomfortable and water all over the ground. Next morning for or surprise it was sunny and we were able to take the car out of the mud with the help of a good man.
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Weather!
Once My friends and I decided to go to camping for the weekend, so, we bought somethings some things/a few things to start our adventure.It took us an hour to get there (I would probably say, It took us an hour to get to the campsite or to our destination). As soon as we got there, we started to set up our tents. up, We were happy and having a good time; the weather was perfect. After we finished, we went to the lake but we realised realized it was too quieted for our liking, and we wanted to listen to some music, so John brought the car near the lake. when Suddenly it started to rain really hard. We all got in the car to wait for it to go off stop, but the rain got harder and harder (I would probably say, but it rained harder and harder). We tried to move the car to go back to the camp, but the car didn't wouldn't move an inch. It had was stuck in the mud, so we ran to the camp and left the car there. It rained all night long.I had never slept in a tent, it was horrible - so uncomfortable and water all over the ground. The next morning, for or to our surprise, it was sunny and we were able to take move the car out of the mud with the help of a good man.
Good job. Be careful with word "so." It implies that one thing happened because something else occurred prior to it. One action is the result of another. But if used incorrectly, the meaning of your sentence can be confusing. For example, you said, "we wanted to listen to some music, so John brought the car near the lake." Was the music coming from John's car? Is that why you brought his car to the lake? That sentence isn't very clear. Let me know if you have any questions.
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Weather!
Once my friends and I decided to go camping for the weekend, so we bought something to start our adventure. It took us an hour to get there. As soon as we got we started to set our tents up, we were happy and having a good time. the weather was perfect. After we finished we went to the lake, but we realized it was too quiet for our liking. We wanted to listen to some music, so John brought the car near the lake. When suddenly it started to rain really hard we all got in the car to wait for it to go off but the rain got harder and harder so we tried to move the car to go back to the camp, but the car didn't move an inch. It had stuck in the mud so we ran to the camp and left the car there. It rained all night long. I had never slept in a tent, it was horrible, so uncomfortable and water all over the ground. Next morning to our surprise it was sunny and we were able to take the car out of the mud with the help of a good man.Want to progress faster?
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