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The Last Day at Work
Time flies! Today is my last day at work in Japan. I can still remember clearly the first day I came here. At that time my Japanese was not very good. When I got off the plane at Narita airport, I could feel the air here was so fresh and clean. From that moment, I started to like this country.Last night I went out drinking with my coworkers, and we had a great time. Everyone was so nice and they said I had changed. There were 25 people in all. To be honest, I cannot remember all of them even though we are in the same department. I feel sorry for that but there are more than 40 people in my department, and we hardly communicate with each other normally. So because of this, it is difficult for me to remember all of them. One of my coworkers told me he was worried about me when he saw me arrive one year ago, as I'd come to Japan for the first time to live and work here, but last night he said his worry was totally unnecessary. He also said my Japanese was perfect. I guess the most praise I got was for my competency (at ...?) and my interpersonal skills.
As well as this, they also said I had become more beautiful after I dyed my hair. I was really happy though I was not sure if they were telling the truth.
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Notes
This is a great piece of writing showing you have a lot of skill in using the English language. Just a few points:
1. 'drinking party' is not correct English, probably because in most English-speaking cultures, drinking is expected at any party so you don't need to say it is a drinking party. The act of going to a bar or club where you consume alcohol is 'to go out drinking'.
2. 'in this case' is to talk about a particular situation as a comparison to others. If you are explaining something as the cause of something else you have to say 'because of this'.
3. 'Competency' means ability to do something well, but you need to say what it is you are competent at.
4. You might want to revise using the past simple, past perfect and past continuous tenses.
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