My favorite color
When I look the sky I think that's so beatiful, on the day I liked walking for all the street and I see the people, animals, every thing. In the night I see the stars and I ask me a lot questions about the universe ¿what is beyond the space?.
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My favorite color
Whenever I look at the sky I think that it is so beautiful, and on these days I like walking in the street and I see the people, animals, everything. In the night I see the stars and I ask myself a lot questions about the universe; what is beyond space?Very well written!
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My favorite color
When I look the sky I think that's so beatiful, on the day I liked walking for all the street and I see the people, animals, every thing. In the night I see the stars and I ask me a lot questions about the universe ¿what is beyond the space?.When I look at the sky I think that's so beautiful. In the day, I like walking through all the streets, and I see the people, the animals. Everything. In the night I see the stars and I ask myself a lot of questions about the universe, such as "What is beyond space?".
Very good, Fatima! I understood most of it :)
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My favorite color
When I look the sky I think, that's so beautiful. In the day I like walking the street and see the people, animals; every thing. At night I see the stars and I ask me a lot questions about the universe. What is beyond this space?A little bit of creative changing. I kept your sentences short and added a little bit of punctuation to try to express the passion and awe behind the story alive. While it may not be grammatically perfect iyour little story conveys a message that needs to be alive to your reader.
You should think of getting a title more relater to your story though.
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