Cactus
My father got an cactus from his friend.
It has several tiny buds.
I'm looking forward to see what color of flower will bloom.
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Cactus
My father got received an cactus from his friend.It has several tiny buds.*
I'm looking forward to seeing what color of flower will bloom.**
* There's nothing wrong with this sentence, but it feels too short, too abrupt. I think it would sound better if you added some color to it by saying "It already has several tiny buds" or "It has several tiny buds growing on it's little arms." (In the last example, I used "arms" instead of "branches." "Branches" would be more correct, but depending on what the cactus looks like, "arms" has a nice image).
** In the last sentence, I couldn't decide whether you should say "flower" (singular) or "flowers" (plural). I think both are correct.
This is another very nice Notebook entry. Your writing style is quiet and modest, but full of really nice visual imagery. After reading this essay, I want to see a photo of your father's cactus!
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Cactus
My father got a cactus from his friend.It has several tiny buds.
I can't wait to see what color flower will bloom!
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