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Introduction Hi, my name is Franzinet but you can call me Franzi. I’m from Venezuela. I’m 25 years old and an industrial maintenance engineer. I have two brothers, one is called Camilo. He’s 24 years old and a lawyer. The other one is called Diego, He’s 2 years old and just started to speak. I’m living in a small flat with my mom. She’s a teacher and loves children. Last year, I started to study English. I did an English course in England for 3 months, it was amazing experience for me. I'm very interested in learning English because I think it will be a great opportunity for my professional life. English is an international language that I can use anywhere in the world.

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Introduction

Hi, my name is Franzinet but you can call me Franzi. I’m from Venezuela.

I’m 25 years old and an industrial maintenance engineer.

I have two brothers, one of whom (to emphasise on your brothers) is called Camilo. He’s 24 years old and a lawyer. My other brother one  (The use of "The other one" to describe someone sounds a little cold in English) is called Diego. He’s two (use words for small numbers) years old and just started to speak.

I’m living in a small flat with my mom. She’s a teacher and loves children.

Last year, I started to study English. I did an English course in England for three  3 months, and it was amazing experience for me.**


I'm very interested in learning English because I think it will be a great opportunity for my professional life. English is an international language that I can use anywhere in the world.

Hi Franzinet, 

You have written very well and your meaning is well understood. Please continue writing!

** We use a conjunction to join two main clauses in a sentence.

I did an English course in England for three months (1st main clause).

It was an amazing experience for me (2nd main clause).

We can use "and" to join them.

I did an English course in England for three  months, and it was amazing experience for me. (Right)

When we join two main clauses with a conjunction, this is a grammar error known as run-on sentences.

I did an English course in England for three  months, it was amazing experience for me. (Incorrect)

Hope this helps.
Cheers, Lance

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.This is good.

"… it was amazing experience" requires the indefinite article "an" after "was."


 The only other thing to correct is the comma after "Diego" – it should be a period (UK: "full stop"). As a matter of style, numbers under ten should usually be spelled out.


Congratulations on your progress so far. Keep up the good work!

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Introduction

Hi, my name is Franzinet but you can call me Franzi. I’m from Venezuela.

I’m 25 years old and an industrial maintenance engineer.

I have two brothers, one is called Camilo. He’s 24 years old and a lawyer. The other one is called Diego, He’s 2 years old and just started to speak.

I’m living in a small flat with my mom. She’s a teacher and loves children.

Last year, I started to study English. I did an English course in England for 3 (three) months, it was an amazing experience for me.
I'm very interested in learning English because I think that it will be a great opportunity for my professional life. English is an international language that I can use anywhere in the world.
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Hey! Yes, I used it! thank you.
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Hi Franzi, so you used English when travelled in Vietnam, didn't you ? Your little Diego must be very cute !

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