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My city in Brazil Hello everbody!! I would like to talk about my city in Brazil. I've lived in Franca since 2015 and I love the city. In Franca there are 250000 people living in here and there are three universities here, UNESP, UNIFRAN and Uni-Facef. The best feature of Franca is life quality, this city is safety, cheap and wheather is soft. Besides that there are many goods restaurants. The shoes industry and coffe productions are the mainly economic activities of the city. Let´s go to known more about Franca. Talk with me. I love Franca.

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My city in Brazil

Hello everbody!!

I would like to talk about my city in Brazil. I've lived in Franca since 2015 and I love the city.
In Franca, there are 250000 people living in here (not incorrect but not how a native speaker would phrase it. This is a grammatical concept called an ellipsis (different from the punctuation mark) and they are common in English speech. You can find more info here  ( http://dictionary.cambridge.org/grammar/british-grammar/about-words-clauses-and-sentences/ellipsis ) and there are three universities here, UNESP, UNIFRAN and Uni-Facef.

The best feature of Franca is the quality of life. This city is safety, cheap and the weather is mild. In addition to that,  there are many goods restaurants.

The shoes industry and coffee productions are the mainly economic activities of the city. (Sounds better to say "The main economic activities in the city are the shoe industry and coffee production.)  

Let´s get to known more about Franca.

If you want to know more about France, talk with me. I love Franca!


Nice work! These corrections are some high-level grammar concepts that English speakers would need to learn in school, particularly regarding sentence order. Your word choice was generally very good. 

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My city in Brazil

Hello everbody!!

I would like to talk about my city in Brazil. I've lived in Franca since 2015 and I love the city.
In Franca, there are 250000 inhabitants people living in here and there are three universities here (1) : UNESP,
UNIFRAN and Uni-Facef. The best feature of Franca is the quality of life quality, -- this city is (2) safety, cheap and
the weather is (3) mild. Besides, there are many goods restaurants. The (4) shoe industry and coffee 
productions are the (5) mainly economic activities of the city. Let´s go to known find out more about Franca.
Talk with to me. I love Franca.

Hi Geandra, 

Thank you for sharing about Franca. I think it's a very liveable city. 

Just some suggestions for you:

(1) We use a colon ( : ) when we are providing a list of items. 

(2) We use the adjective (safe) instead of the noun (safety) to describe the city.

(3) We use "mild" to describe weather that is not too extreme (eg not too hot in the summer and not too cold in the winter)

(4) In this case, "shoe" is an adjective describing the kind of "industry" which is a noun. You can also think of "shoe industry" as a noun phrase. Therefore, there is no letter "s" for shoes as "shoe" is used as an adjective.

(5) We use "main" as an adjective, not an adverb.

Hope this helps.

Cheers, 
Lance

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My city in Brazil

Hello everybody!!

I would like to talk about my city in Brazil. I've lived in Franca since 2015 and I love the city.
In Franca, there are 250,000 people living in here and there are three universities here : UNESP,
UNIFRAN and Uni-Facef. The best feature  part of about Franca is the life quality of life -  this city is safety, cheap and
the wheather is soft nice. Besides that, there are many goods restaurants. The shoes footwear industry and coffee
productions are the mainly economic activities of the city. Let´s go get to known more about Franca.
Talk with me. I love Franca.

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Hi Geandra,

Sorry for marking up the text - it's really not as bad as I've made it out to be... You really did very well! Keep it up and all the best on your language journey :)

Cheers,

Anshuman

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