TOEFL integrated writing-TPO1
The main topic of both the talk and the passage is the effect of an action in which employees are given an option to choose between four-day workweek and five-day workweek. According to the passage both companies and employees would benefit from this action; however, the lecturer finds this idea questionable, citing three reasons to reject the points in the passage.
First of all, the author claims that those companies which decide to give this option to their staff make more profit because employees have more time to rest, and as a result, work more precisely, and have less errors. The lecturer, on the other hand, refutes this idea, saying that with this policy the companies are forced to pay more. He elaborates on this by mentioning that hiring more employees needs to pay more money for training, health insurance, providing enough space, and more equipment. therefore, it costs much more and consequently it causes less profit for companies.
Next, the author contends that offering this option would reduce unemployment rate because when full-time employees start working less hours, some other people can be hired to fill in for them. In contrast the lecturer highlights the fact that not only does this cost more for companies, but also there would be more pressure on four-hours employees to do the same work as what full-time ones do because the employers want to make the increased costs up.
Finally, the author states that those employees who choose this option have more time in hand to devote to their families, and improve the quality of their private life. The lecturer, nevertheless, contradicts this view. He posits that although these employees have more extra time, they have less time to advance and as a result they have less chance to get promoted.
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TOEFL integrated writing-TPO1
The main topic of both the talk and the passage is the effect of an action in which employees are given an option to choose between a four-day workweek and a five-day workweek. According to the passage, both companies and employees would benefit from this action; however, the lecturer finds this idea questionable, citing three reasons to reject the points in the passage.First of all, the author claims that those companies which decide to give this option to their staff make more profit because employees have more time to rest and, as a result, work more precisely, and have fewer errors. The lecturer, on the other hand, refutes this idea, saying that with this policy the companies are forced to pay more. He elaborates on this by mentioning that hiring more employees requires them to pay more money for training, health insurance, providing enough space, and more equipment. Therefore, it costs much more and, consequently, it reduces profit for companies.
Next, the author contends that offering this option would reduce the unemployment rate, because when full-time employees start working fewer hours, some other people can be hired to fill in for them. In contrast, the lecturer highlights the fact that not only does this cost more for companies, but there would also be more pressure on four-hours employees to do the same work as what full-time ones do because the employers want to make up the increased costs.
Finally, the author states that those employees who choose this option have more time in hand to devote to their families, and improve the quality of their private life. The lecturer, nevertheless, contradicts this view. He posits that although these employees have more extra time, they have less time to advance and as a result they have less chance to get promoted.
-Your English is very good. Work on article usage though.
-Use 'fewer' for countable nouns, 'less' for uncountable nouns which don't have a plural form.
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