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Sophia Shih
A chance to be an exchange student and study abroad If I have an opportunity to be an exchange student when I enter college.I'll study in UK.Here are three reasons why I want to study there.First, it is the comfortable weather make me want to go there.In contrast of the hot and stuffy weather in Taiwan,it is much cooler in UK.Secondly,the colleges there are immersed in the aesthetic atmosphere,which has me want to bath in it.Last but not least,I want to study fine art and design there.There are so many prestigious colleges are professional with art. If I'm lucky enough to be admitted to the college I apply.I must to get ready for going abroad.I have to improve my English skill first,it'll be a shame that I can't converse with the natives ,let alone understand what my professor is talking about.What's more,I'll keep my passion with art , make more works ,and constantly notice what's in fashion,for stimulating my sense of art.I think the most important thing is to be confident.If a person is lack of confidence ,that will be hard to make people believe in you,unless you trust yourself first.

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A chance to be an exchange student and study abroad

If I have an/the opportunity to be an exchange student when I am at/[enter] college, I'll study in the UK.Here are three reasons why I want to study there.First, it is the comfortable weather that makes me want to go there. In contrast to of the hot and stuffy/sultry weather in Taiwan, it is much cooler in the UK. Secondly, the colleges there are immersed in the an aesthetic atmosphere, which has me wanting/makes me want to bathe in it. Last but not least*, I want to study fine art and design there.There are so many prestigious colleges which are professional with about art.      * this expression is correct

If I'm lucky enough to be admitted to/accepted at the college to which I apply. I must to get ready [for going]/to go abroad. I have to improve my English skill first, as it'll/it would be a shame [that]/if I can't converse with the *natives English speakers, let alone understand what my professor is talking about.What's more, I'll keep/maintain my passion for with art , make more works ,and constantly take notice of what's in fashion, [for stimulating]/to stimulate my creativity/sense of art. I think the most important thing is to be confident. If a person is lacking of in/lacks confidence, that/it will be hard to make people believe in him you, [unless you trust yourself first].

*  'the natives'  is an old-fashioned way of referring to the inhabitants of a country, which carries echoes of 'the Empire', and is therefore considered patronising.  Unless used ironically, it is regarded as pejorative.

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Hey! Good job on the written example - just some corrections below. :)


A chance to be an exchange student and study abroad

If I had the opportunity to be an exchange student when I enter college, I'll would study in the UK. Here  These are the three reasons why I want to study there. First, it is the comfortable weather is very inviting makes me want to go there. In contrast of to the hot and stuffy weather in Taiwan, it is much cooler in the UK. Secondly, the colleges there are aesthetically pleasing, making me want to bask in its beauty.  immersed in the aesthetic atmosphere, which has me want to bath in it.Last but not the least, I want to study fine arts and design in this country where there are so many prestigious colleges and art professionals. are professional with art.

If I am were lucky enough to be admitted to the college I would apply to, I must to get ready to for going abroad. I have to improve my English skill  proficiency first as it'll  would be a shame if that I could not can't converse with the natives, let alone understand what my professor would talk about ing about. What's more, Moreover, I'll keep my strong passion for art, make more works, and constantly notice what's in fashion, for to stimulate ing my sense of art.

I think the most important thing is to be confident. If a person is lacks of confidence, that will be it would be hard to make people believe in you, unless you trust yourself first.

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