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JIDAIGEKI
I've never seen a "JIDAIGEKI" (Japanese historical play) in English before.
For example, "The Seven Samurai", "The Hidden Fortress" and "Zatouichi".
I have had an interest in it recently.
I want to make a performance based on "JIDAIGEKI" .
I think that the performance may appeal to foreign tourists. They will have fun.
*I hope that seeing it without all the correctional markings will help! Let me know if you have any questions.
Notes:
Explanations can be put in parentheses (these are parentheses).
Appeal is a good vocabulary word if you want to say that you think someone will like something. You can also try putting what you want to say into smaller sentences. That will make them less confusing.
JIDAIGEKI
I didn't almost never see watch* a "JIDAIGEKI" before (jidai-geki means "Japanese historical play" in English).**For example, there's "The Seven Samurai", "The Hidden Fortress" and "Zatouichi".***
I have developed an interest about in it recently.
I want to make a performance based on "JIDAIGEKI" .
I think that the perfomance may would makes an audience who is of foreign tourists have fun.**** {better: I think that the performance would be fun for a foreign audience."}
*"Never seeing" jidai-geki implies that it isn't available. "Never watching" it indicates that you made a decision not to see it.
**Having this explanation of jidai-geki in the middle of the sentence disrupts the flow of the sentence. It reads clearer when placed in parenthesis at the end of the sentence.
***There was no verb here, so it was an incomplete sentence.
****"Foreign tourists" doesn't sound nice; there's a double emphasis that these people are outsiders. If you want to emphasize that these are non-Japanese people, saying either "foreign audience" or "tourists" is sufficient.
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