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A White Snake I like to ride my scooter around the near city. I especially like to find a cafe to sit and have a quiet time to put my mind at ease. Last Sunday, I entered a new cafe. The first floor was full of customers, so I was asked to go up on the second floor. There was a big table with a bunch of people talking so loud. "They must be having a classmate reunion." I thought. "How old are they? 40? 45?" I wondered during the whole time before they left. I took out my scribble book thinking to be going to draw something. They did not stay long. At least, I had only taken two or three sips of my coffee. Then, the coffee shop owner lady came up to clean up the dishes. She said sorry about the loudness. As she was cleaning, she started to chat with me. We had a long conversation together. Until now, I still don't know why she would talk to me that much. She said she saw a beautiful white snake in her age of five. Later, I decided to make the white snake stay in my scribble book. Maybe it was just because my mind was totally blank. And the white snake just gave me a beautiful imagination.

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A White Snake

I like to ride my scooter around the near city.
I especially like to find a cafe where I can to sit down  and have a quiet time on my own, just for the sake of /having some  peace of mind/ putting my mind at ease.( use this if you are worrying about something)
Last Sunday, I entered a new café..> Last Sunday, I did just that, when I found myself a new café for that purpose.
The first floor was full of customers, so I was asked to go up to on the second floor.
There was a big table with a bunch of people talking so loud.> When I got to the second floor, I saw a bunch of people sitting at a table, and they were talking among themselves very loudly.
They must be having a class reunion gathering, I thought.
"How old are they? 40? 45?" I wondered during the whole time before they were there until they left.
I took out my scribble book thinking to be going to draw something.> Later, I took out my scribble book, thinking that I might want to draw something.
They did not stay long. At least, I had only taken two or three sips of my coffee.?>  However, I did not draw for long, just about the time it took me to have a few sips of my coffee.
Then, the coffee shop owner lady came up to clean up the dishes.> Then the lady owner of the café came upstairs to clear the table .
She said sorry about the loudness.> She apologised to me for the noise those customers had made.
As she was cleaning, she started to chat with me. > While she was clearing the table, she starting chatting with me. ( As she was cleaning the table, she noticed that it was slightly broken>) Check> While vs As .
We had a long conversation together.
Until now, I still don't know why she would want to talk to me that much.
She said told me that she had seen saw a beautiful white snake when she was 5 years old. in her age of five.. >She also told me about the time she saw a beautiful white snake when she was 5 years old.
Later, I decided to make the white snake stay in my scribble book.> Later, I decided to draw a white snake in my scribble book.
Maybe it was just because my mind was totally blank then > Maybe it is just because my mind at that time was devoid of any ideas on what to draw .
And the white snake just gave me a beautiful imagination.>  And the idea of drawing a white snake really aroused my imagination.
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 I really don't know why she wanted to talk to me that much.

She said she saw a beautiful white snake when she was five years old.

Later, I decided to draw a white snake in my scribble book.

你写的很好啊

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