My first essay of the Ielts writing task 2 question
Question: Some people believe that media should be allowed to publish information about the private lives of famous people. Others say that everybody has a right to privacy and this practice must be controlled or even stopped. Discuss both views.
Answer:
Media publishes stories of celebrities because it often attracts an enormous audience. However, it is believed that this should be controlled or ended due to private rights of famous or rich people. This essay will discuss the above issues.
One one hand, public people as well as others have their own personal lives and might not want their privacy to be public. The media is an entity working with the aim of seducing views, so it makes sense that they need to collect as much information as possible to produce breaking news. Intervencing too much on celebirities' lives might put high pressures and stresses on them. It is obvious that everyone has flaws and celebrities is not an exception. If a journalist writes an article about the weakness of celebrity, it might put them in danger or even demolish their career. In addition, there are also some employees with bad work ethics working in the media industry. Somtimes they use their power to damage the image of persons they don't like.
On the other hand, there is a win - win cooperation between famous people and the media. Celebrity sometimes takes advantage of the media to boost their career. For example, a girl who wants to enter the showbiz, she will pay money for being appeared on the newspapers or magazines, even in the headlines. Another example is that a celebrity aims of heating her name again might do some crazy actions to attract the media to write sensational articles about them. Moreover, supporters and fans always would like to have latest updated information about their idols and idols might want to stay in touch with their fans, so it is vital that media is the bridge between them.
In conclusion, the media can intervence into the privacy of celebrity as long as it doesn't harm them or make them feel annoyed. In my opinion, i think that public people have their own privacy right, so media shouldn't write to much about their personal lives, especially their weaknesses and flaws.
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Thank you Gavin
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I am not an IELTS examiner, but I feel that the quality of this writing is maybe worthy of an "8". Overall, well written. A few minor spelling errors, so just be careful with your spelling.
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