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GRE AWA practice_argument_building dormitories The author concludes that Buckingham College should build new dormitories to meet the demand of student housing. However, readers need further proof to verify the argument offered by the author. The memo states that based on current trends, the enrollment rate of the college will double over the next 50 years. However, how the statistic be produced? The predictive model and the quantitative method should be provided in order to verify whether the claim is correct or not. For example, if the trend is predicted by using the information in the past, some bias may occur because the environment included economy, politics, and many other aspects are different from now. Therefore, we should check whether the prediction is reliable or not before we believe the claim. Another weakness of the argument is that it provides no information about the type of students in Buckingham College. If the college is a “community college” which most of students there are local residents who live with their parents, it’s unnecessary to build too many dormitories. But if the college is popular in the nation and students in this school come form other places of the nation, the claim about building new dormitories is more likely to be true. Therefore, the college should conduct a research of students’ background before deciding whether to build new dormitories. Another reason that the college should build new dormitories is that it can attract more prospective students to enroll at Buckingham. However, we need more evidence to verify this claim. A survey about the reason of choosing school should be conducted. A possible method is that we can randomly choose some students who have already enrolled in the college and ask them: “What is the main reason when you decided to attend this school?”. Given some choices such that the academic research, the quality of faculty members, the quantity of books in the library, the possibility of getting a good job after graduation, the food in the school’s restaurant, etc. Of course, the quality of dormitories should be one of the reason. After finishing the survey, we have to use this data to extract some useful information. If most of students choose the quality of dormitories to be the main reason, we should accept this suggestion. However, if there are a large proportion of other reasons be chose, this suggestion may not be a good one. To strength the argument, the author would have to provide more information as above mentioned.

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GRE AWA practice_argument_building dormitories

The author concludes that Buckingham College should build new dormitories to meet the demands of student housing. However, readers need some evidence to support this argument.

The memo states that based on current trends, the enrollment rate of the college will double over the next 50 years. However, where does this statistic come from? The predictive model and the quantitative method can be adduced to decide whether the claim is correct or not. For example, if the trend is predicted according to historical data, some bias may occur due to because a change in economy, politics, and several other aspects between then and now. Therefore, we should check whether the prediction is reliable or not before we believe the claim.*

Another weakness of the argument is that it provides no information about the type of students in Buckingham College. If the college is a “community college” where most students are locals living with their parents, so many dorms will not be needed. But if the college is nationally popular and students come from nationwide, the claim about building new dorms is more likely to be true. Therefore, the college should research students’ backgrounds before deciding whether to build new dormitories.

Another reason that the college should build new dormitories is that this can attract more students to enroll. However, more evidence is needed to verify this claim. A survey about the reason of choosing the school should be conducted. A random sample of current students can be asked the closed question "What was the main factor that attracted you to this school?”, listing: academic research; quality of faculty members; the quantity of books in the library; career prospects after graduation, the food in the school’s restaurant, and finally, of course, the quality of dormitories. After taking the survey, we need to analyse this data to extract some useful information. If most students choose the quality of dormitories to be the main reason, we should accept this suggestion. However, if a large proportion of other reasons is chosen, this suggestion may not be a good one.

To strengthen the argument, the author would have to provide more information than that mentioned above.

*perhaps this sentence can be omitted.

Very well written!

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