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The Thing That A Glass Has Taught Me I have many cups no matter in the past or in the present. Recently, I bought a new glass on the Internet, it's a transparent glass with a lot of pieces of cheery blossom petals and two beautiful white fawns. I like it because of its dreamlike colors and patterns. In order to protect it well, I bought a cup coat for it. Though I find people including me will not appreciate its beauty as long as I put the bottlecoat on it, I still want to try my best to avoid its break. And that small thing make me start to think of something. Just like the way which I treat with my favorite cup, I realize there is a strong possibility that the reason why my parents force me to do something which I dislike is that they want to protect me from being defeated by the cruel world, and they even use their all strength and all wisdom for it. As a result, I have been wearing on an ugly but useful clothes to hug fewer sadness, anger, desperations and more happiness from others and mine. When I was young, it was really hard for me to understand my loved ones' purposes. I complained, lost my temper, used many awful ways to express my dissatisfaction, and I forgot to use my heart to see this kind of love instead of using my eyes to see the superficiality. Though actually it cannot be avoided that my parents have been making mistakes in expressing their truly feelings, but most of those mistakes can be forgiven, because I find nobody can treat me better than my parents since I grow up and we most people cannot break though the limitation of the ages. Luckily, I realize that truth when I own a precious glass. And I genuinely hope it's not late. That's the thing that a glass has taught me.

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I have owned many cups both in the past and in the present. Recently, I bought a new glass on the Internet. it's a transparent glass with a lot of pieces of  blossom petals and two beautiful white fawns. I like it because of its dreamlike colors and patterns. In order to protect it well, I bought a cup coat for it. (Although other people including myself will be unable to appreciate its beauty with the bottle coat on it, I still want to try my best to protect it.) - I think this fits the tone of the passage better. Though I find people including me will not appreciate its beauty as long as I put the bottlecoat on it, I still want to try my best to avoid its break. And that small thing made me start to think of realize something.

Just like the way in which I treat with my favorite cup (You can also say: "Just like how I treat my favorite cup"), I realized that there is a strong possibility that the reason why my parents force me to do things that I dislike is because they want to protect me from being harmed by the cruel world, to the point where they will use all of their strength and wisdom to do so. As a result, I have been wearing putting on an ugly but useful clothes to hug fewer avoid sadness, anger, and desperations and ,while finding more happiness from others and mine "from within" or "from. When I was young, it was really hard for me to understand my loved ones' purposes. I complained, lost my temper, used many awful ways to and expressed my dissatisfaction in many awful ways. to, and I forgot to use my heart to see this kind of love instead of using my eyes to see the superficiality. (I would rephrase this as follows: "I forgot that I needed to use my heart instead of my eyes to see this kind of love.") Even though my parents have made mistakes in expressing their true feelings, but most of those mistakes can be forgiven because I find nobody will treat me better than my parents and most people cannot break though the limitation of the ages. --> (I can't figure out what you're trying to say here) Luckily, I realized this truth from my precious glass. And I genuinely hope it's not too late.


Great job. It was a really difficult to make changes without detracting from your tone.

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