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I have owned many cups both in the past and in the present. Recently, I bought a new glass on the Internet. it's a transparent glass with a lot of pieces of blossom petals and two beautiful white fawns. I like it because of its dreamlike colors and patterns. In order to protect it well, I bought a cup coat for it. (Although other people including myself will be unable to appreciate its beauty with the bottle coat on it, I still want to try my best to protect it.) - I think this fits the tone of the passage better. Though I find people including me will not appreciate its beauty as long as I put the bottlecoat on it, I still want to try my best to avoid its break. And that small thing made me start to think of realize something.
Great job. It was a really difficult to make changes without detracting from your tone.
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