JUST A DIARY ON MAR.2ND
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JUST A DIARY ON MAR.2ND (part2)
As I discribed in last diary( on Mar.2nd), I took a trip to West United States. I went to San diego after enjoying doing sight-seeing in LA. I left LA for San diego at 7:00Am by train. Actually, because of having hang-over, I was about to miss the train for San diego. Fortunately i was able to get on it. it made me feel relieved so much. By any chance, the day when I was in San diego, it was the day of super bowl 2017. I was so happy to watch the Super Bowl in America which is home of Foot ball. Because I had done Foot ball in Japan for 3 years, actually...
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JUST A DIARY ON MAR.2ND
I want someone to correct my diary. Could you do that for me, please?JUST A DIARY ON MAR.2ND (part2)
As I described in last diary( on Mar.2nd), I took a trip to the Western United States. I went to San Diego after enjoying doing sight-seeing in LA. I left LA for San Diego at 7:00Am by train. Actually, because of having a hang-over, I was about to miss the train for San Diego. Fortunately i was able to get on it. it made me feel so relieved so much. By any chance, the day when I was in San Diego, it was the day of the Super Bowl 2017. I was so happy to watch the Super Bowl in America, which is the home of football. Because I had done football in Japan for 3 years, actually...
Wow, cool! Did you play football in school? What is it like to play football in Japan? Is it different from in America?
Very nice entry! You are missing the word "the" in a few places and you occasionally have some extra words in your sentences. Also, be sure to capitalize the names of places and events!
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JUST A DIARY ON MAR.2ND
I want someone to correct my diary. Could you do that for me, please?JUST A DIARY ON MAR.2ND (part2)
As I described in my last diary( on Mar.2nd), I took a trip to the western United States. I went to San Diego after enjoying doing sight-seeing in LA. I left LA for San Diego at 7:00a.m. by train. Actually, because I had a of having hang-over, I nearly was about to missed the train for San Diego. Fortunately, I was able to get/catch on it and I was very relieved. it made me feel relieved so much. By any chance, the day when I arrived was in San Diego, it was the day of the Super Bowl 2017. I was so happy to watch the Super Bowl in America which is the home of American football, because I had played done football in Japan for 3 years, actually...
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JUST A DIARY ON MAR.2ND
I want someone to correct my diary. Could you do that for me, please?JUST A DIARY ON MAR.2ND (part2)
As I described in last diary( on Mar.2nd), I took a trip to the west coast of the United States. I went to San Diego after enjoying doing some sight-seeing in LA. I left LA for San Diego at 7:00Am by train. Actually, because I was hungover of having hang-over, I was about to almost missed the train for San Diego. Fortunately I was able to get on it. it made me feel relieved so much. By any chance, Coincidentally, the day when I was in San Diego was the day of the super bowl 2017. I was so happy to watch the Super Bowl in America which is the home of football. Because I had done Foot ball in Japan for 3 years, actually...
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As I described in my last diary( on Mar.2nd), I took a trip to the western United States. I went to San Diego after enjoying sight-seeing in LA. I left LA for San Diego at 7:00Am by train. Actually, because I had a hang-over, I nearly missed the train for San Diego. Fortunately I was able to get on it. It made me feel so relieved. By chance, the day when I was in San Diego, it was the day of the Super Bowl 2017. I was so happy to watch the Super Bowl in America which is the home of football, because I had done football in Japan for 3 years, actually...
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