Part of my application form in English. Is it correct?
Hi! I'm preparing a project proposal. Can you check it? Thnx in advance!
The applicant wants to organize 4 round swimming meeting of the pupils, youth and trainers of five associations from partner countries. Actions are addressed to about 100 direct participants per event. Besides the contest there will be also a conference for trainers which will spread the positive impressions of mutual cooperation and integrate participants.
…: this project partner will primarily coordinate and take care of participants from Czech Republic (between meetings as well as during particular events) and secure promotion campaign in their surroundings including use of social media. Partner will also provide transport of participants, prepare a speech for training conference in order to improve crossborder intercultural dialog and ensure all necessary nonfinancial support.
We have been cooperating in the field of innovation in physical education, especially in gaining experience for building and developing swimming skills of youth (pupils and students) with a partner sports organization in Czech Republic since 2007. Both organizations help youth in the process of learning to swim by offering swimming courses on different levels, giving young people opportunity to advance their skills and participate in sporting events, arranging sports competitions etc.
1st part of cooperative activities aimed at:
-exploring common heritage of participating countries through collective sport competitions;
-discovering of historical and natural beauties of the host region Silesia and our city, which (because of it’s history) has a rich, multicultural heritage, and is filled with a spirit of tolerance and cooperation;
- sharing ideas, experiences and spread the positive impressions of mutual cooperation in participants’ regions.
All five partner institutions will focus on deepening the contacts between participants, associations and partner towns. Meeting with representatives of the Municipality is planned as well as evaluation will be conducted and awards will be given. Partners will experience the culture of other participating countries. Project also contribute to close crossborder cooperation between project partners.
Budget:(..) electronic boards renting in order to present the results of the competitions (our association already have and provide to the project a special program for board service); referees' remuneration every round needs to be refereed by professional judges.
Search from various English teachers...
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My suggestions: 1. Change "organize 4 round swimming meeting" to "organize a 4 round swimming competition" ... in the USA we say "swim meet" but for a proposal, make it more formal and call it competition. 2. Change "our city, which (because of it’s history) has a rich, multicultural heritage," to "our city, which has a rich, multicultural heritage,". Because history and heritage are similar, don't use one to explain the other. My suggestions are for USA English; I'm not sure my suggested changes fit your audience.
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