could you correct my essay?thanks
The City Park
There are two city park in my hometown. one is Xichun park. another one is Fushan park.
I go though the Xichun park four times a day. Because it’s just on my way to work.
Xichun park has more than thirty years of history. It built in 1983.
The park has a small gate. Enter it, you could walk through a long and narrow corridor. Then, you could see a old tree stands on the vast grassland . It also has more than 400 years of history.
In park, the Xichun mountain is very famous in our city, it’s not very high, but really beautiful. every day ,there are many people climb in it. How pleasant!
I walk through this beautiful place four times a day. I feel very lucky. Just since this ,I regard I am a happy person.
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The City Park
I go though the Xichun park four times a day. B because it’s on my way to work.
Xichun park has more than thirty years of history. It was built in 1983.
The park has a small gate. As you enter it, you could can walk through a long and narrow corridor. Then, you could can see an old tree standing on the vast grassland . It also has more than 400 years of history.
In the park stands the Xichun mountain. It is very famous in our city. It’s not very high, but really beautiful. Every day, there are many people climbing in it. How pleasant!
I walk through this beautiful place four times a day. I feel very lucky. Just since this ,I regard I am a happy person. This helps makes me a happy person.
Great job Jane! I'm not sure exactly what you mean with your last sentence. Do you mean that walking through the park every day makes you happy?
Hope this helps!
Regina :)
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could you correct my essay?thanks
The City Park
There are two city parks in my hometown. oOne is Xichun pPark, another and the one other is Fushan pPark. I go Built in 1983, Xichun pPark has more than thirty years of history. (You could say: Xichun Park is more than 30 years old.) It built in 1983.
The park has a small gate. Once you Eenter it, you could walk through a long and narrow corridor. Then you could see an old tree standsing on the a vast grassland. It also has more than 400 years of history. (You could say: The tree is over 400 years old.)
In thepark, the Xichun mMountain, which is very famous in our city, is situated in the park. iIt’s not very high, but it is really beautiful. eEvery day ,there are many people climb in it. How pleasant! (How nice!)
I walk through this beautiful place four times a day. I feel very lucky Jjust since because of this. I regard I am It makes me a happy person.
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