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Marred Shoes My shoes were marred by the raining, so I had to buy a new pair. As I didn’t have money left, I tried to redeem in my neighborhood some tickets grandma left on the table, you know, milk and cereals stuff, but unfortunately they were expired. How do my family end up so poor? Since I’m young I’ve borne with the question, the thing about my poverty. At school, people laugh at me short’s gaps, but I didn’t care, cause I was sure that one day I will be somebody. My sole hope was my education. Even if I didn’t have money to pay the bus fare, grandpa, -- I miss him so much—used to tell me, ‘Hey, niño, be integral in your convictions. That’s the only thing that, not matter your social status, it will make you an august man. The thing is, grandpa, I don’t want to be a respected man. I just want to have money to buy a new pair of shoes.

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Marred Shoes

My shoes were marred by the raining, so I had to buy a new pair.
As I didn’t have money left, I tried to redeem in my neighborhood some tickets grandma left on the table, you know, milk and cereals stuff, but unfortunately they were expired.
How do  did my family end up so poor? ("do" is present; "end up" implies a reference to the past)
Since I’m young I’ve borne I've been born (use past perfect continuous here: http://www.englishpage.com/verbpage/pastperfectcontinuous.html) with the question, the thing about my poverty.
At school, people laugh at my me (me is a pronoun; my is possessive) short’s gaps, but I didn’t care, cause I was sure that one day I will be somebody. (make all the verbs in this sentence match tense: so either "laughed + didn't care +was sure" OR "laugh + don't care + am sure")
My sole hope was my education.
Even if I didn’t have money to pay the bus fare, grandpa, -- I miss him so much—used to tell me, ‘Hey, niño, be integral have integrity in your convictions. That’s the only thing that, not matters, not your social status, it will make you an august man (this phrase is kind of old-timey and literary in English, but you can use it if you want).
The thing is, grandpa, I don’t want to be a respected man.
I just want to have money to buy a new pair of shoes.
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Love the tone. Keep writing! :)

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