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I’m into Pokemon Go again.
I’ve been busy catching Pokemon since last week.They have* updated the game and 80 more monsters are available now.
Last year, when Pokemon Go was first released in Singapore, I felt [like]/as though (I became/I had become) a different person. I’d go out and walk every day. I don’t like walking in hot weather, but this game changed my habit easily. It made me feel like walking more. I thought/[was like], ‘There is a PokeStop over there. Let’s go! I could get another Pokemon on the way. If not, at least I can get Pokeballs.'
However, after a month or so, my obsession wore off. At that time, my level was 20 and it was very hard to reach the next level, because I couldn’t encounter new monsters, which give me high points. What I constantly caught were birds or bats. I finally stopped opening the app.
So, this update was really a good news [to]/for me. It encouraged me to play Pokemon Go again. I’ve been catching new Pokemon, which makes me feel so excited.
While I’m writing this, I thought it’s interesting to ask myself/[think about]* why Pokemon Go appeals to me so much, and I came up with four reasons.
- Easy to play: I don’t have much experience of gaming, but I don’t have any trouble playing it.
- Cute monsters: actually, I don’t know Pokemon very much. The only character (that is) familiar to me is Pikachu. When I was a child, Pokemon animé was popular, but I preferred Sailor Moon.
- Good exercise: After I have* walked a lot and caught Pokemon, I feel refreshed.
- Feel connected to people: While I’m playing Pokemon Go, I also notice people around me doing the same. I can tell by their way of moving/to the way they move their finger. Seeing it, I feel connected to them. They are not faceless people. (Having said that, I can’t speak to them; I’m such an introvert.)
* For a recent past event leading on to something you describe, you should use the present perfect tense : 'I have walked', etc.
* to avoid using the word 'think' or thought' again in the same sentence
Beautifully written, well done !
I’m into Pokemon Go again.
I’ve been busy catching Pokemon since last week.They updated the game and 80 more monsters are available now.
Last year, when Pokemon Go was first released in Singapore, I felt like I became a different person. I’d go out and walk everyday. I don’t like walking in hot weather, but this game changed my habits easily. It made me feel like walking more. I was like, ‘There is a PokeStop over there. Let’s go! I could get another Pokemon on the way. If not, at least I can get Pokeballs.'*
However, after a month or so, my obsession wore off. At that time, my level was 20 and it was very hard to reach the next level, because I couldn’t encounter new monsters, which give me high points. What I constantly caught were birds or bats. I finally stopped open the app.
So, this update was really a good news to me. It encouraged me to play Pokemon Go again. I’ve been catching new Pokemon, which makes me feel so excited.
While I’m writing this, I though it’s interesting to think about why Pokemon Go appeals to me so much, and I came up with four reasons.
- Easy to play: I don’t have much experience of gaming but I don’t have any trouble playing it.
- Cute monsters: actually, I don’t know Pokemon very much. The only character that familiar to me is Pikachu. When I was a child, Pokemon anime was popular, but I preferred Sailor Moon.
- Good exercise: After I walked a lot and caught Pokemon, I feel felt refreshed.**
- Feel connected to people: While I’m playing Pokemon Go, I also notice people around doing the same. I can tell by their the way to they move their finger. Seeing it, I feel connected to them. They are not faceless people. (Having said that, I can’t speak to them. I’m such an introvert.)
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Nice job! I also haven't played in a while. Maybe it is time for me to re-open the app.
* "I was like" is very, very casual. It's a phrase that I would speak, but I would almost never write it. I would change that to "I would think 'There's a PokeStop over there...'" (you did use it correctly, though.)
** The way you have it written, you're speaking about how you used to feel before. If you still feel that way, try "After I walk a lot and catch Pokemon, I feel refreshed."
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