A long trip
He traveled to ten countries of South America in eighteen months. He rode a motorcycle during all the trip.He could meet others motorcycle travelers and make friends.The problems were many: injuries, falls, hunger, storms and many more, but He could overcome all of them.
First, He went to Bolivia, He was amazed when He knew salar de Uyuni .Then He traveled to Argentina ,He had the opportunity to know Iguazu Falls. After that , He crossed the Andes to Chile and He Went to Brazil where He wanted to know a place with a large concentration of wildlife so, He found a place called Pantanal. Next, He took a boat for six days to Manaos and then He went to Venezuela, there He visited the Tepuy Roraima.He was surprised for the beautiful view from the top of the Tepuy.
Finally, He returned to his daily life and He could learn a lot about his experience.He got to know himself better and He could recognize his fears, weaknesses and limits.
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A Long Trip
He traveled to ten countries in South America in eighteen months. He rode a motorcycle for the duration of the trip. He met other motorcycle travelers and made friends.There were many problems: injuries, falls, hunger, storms, and many more, but he overcame all of them.
First, he went to Bolivia. He was amazed when he knew Salar de Uyuni .Then he traveled to Argentina. He had the opportunity to see Iguazu Falls. After that , he crossed the Andes to Chile and he went to Brazil where he wanted to find a place with a large concentration of wildlife. He found a place called Pantanal. Next, he took a boat for six days to Manaos and then he went to Venezuela. There he visited the Tepuy Roraima. He was surprised by the beautiful view from the top of the Tepuy.
Finally, he returned to his daily life. He learned a lot about his experience. He got to know himself better and he could recognize his fears, weaknesses, and limits.
Good job with this! Here's a couple of tips:
- You do not need to capitalise a person "he" in the middle of a sentence, only at the start of a sentence. It only needs to be capitalised mid-sentence if it is the name of a person.
- Try to stay in the same tense when describing something. There were a couple of times that you switched to present tense, but the story is in the past and so should always be in past tense.
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