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IELTS task 1practice! Hi everyone ,I'm Marshall. I'm preparing for the test. Hoping everybody could give me advises about how to improve my ability. It would be a great help if you could correct me or suggest my article. Thanks. /*The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.*/ There are two charts. One of which shows that students study for career or for interest by different age groups, and the other shows that by separate age group how many of them receive the support. Let's look at the first chart in detail. We could know that when the age of groups increase ,the percentage of studying for career gradually decline. In contrast, the percentage of studying for interest also raise with the age increasing. On the other chart, we could see that over 50% of people who are under 30 are supported by employers. The group between 30 to 39 reaches the lowest point, but the percentage increases after this interval. In conclusion, the people under 40 are more willing to study for career. Also the trend is similar to the percentage of the support by employers. When the age is beyond 40, the tendency of two charts are similar.

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IELTS task 1practice!

Hi everyone ,I'm Marshall.
I'm preparing for the test. I hope somebody Hoping everybody could give me advice on advises about how to improve my ability.
It would be a great help if you could correct me or make suggestions to suggest my article.
Thanks.

/*The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.*/

There are two charts. One of which shows  the pecentage of  that students that study for career or for interest grouped by different age groups, and the other shows the overall percentage of students that receive support grouped that by separate age group how many of them receive the support.

Let's look at the first chart in detail. We could see know that as when the age of groups increases, the percentage of studying for career gradually declines. In contrast, the percentage of studying for interest rises  also raise with the age increasing.

On the other chart, we could see that over 50% of students people who are under 30 are supported by employers. The group between 30 to 39 age group reaches the lowest point, but the percentage increases gradually after this interval.but doesn't reach the percentages of people under 30.

In conclusion, the more people under 40 are more willing to study for career. Also the trend is similar to the percentage of the support by employers. When the age is beyond 40, the tendency of two charts are similar. 
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I am also preparing for a test(CATTI). I hope that you will get a good grade.

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