Your eyesight is your ability to see (OxfordDictionary)
Nowadays, people made a great stride in medicine. Many of diseases are healed and cost no much money.
I am eager to tell about significant change in my life. It started in school, probably in 5th grade. My eyesight was getting worse and as I remember in the first half of a year I felt shy wearing glasses. I thought they would tell "Hey, look yonder! There is a four-glasses!" and the all stuff like this. Eventually, I was lucky to have friends who hadn't even noticed the glasses.
The years rolled by and optical lenses appeared in our town soon. I got used to put on lenses at eyes after the first two weeks about and I started to apply it. To be fair, either not of all friends about me got that I had bad eyesight and more over I didn't get it as they. Sometimes I forgot to put off them and was falling asleep. By next morning the eyes were completely red. My eyesight gradually was inevitably getting down because of a careless behavior. Some of fellows had already made the operation on eyesight and felt satisfied. I thought I might as well do the same. Doctors checked my health and at my birthday I had already done it. Two weeks had passed before the eyes sharpness was recovered.
It is known that human eye can see about one hundred pixels. Any device is far away from this value. What I am eager to say writing the note that we need thoroughly care about health. Your eyesight is not only your ability to see. It defines a quality of your life.
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Your eyesight is your ability to see (OxfordDictionary)
Nowadays, great strides are being made in medicine*. Many diseases are healed for little money.I am eager to tell about a significant change in my life. It started in school, probably in 5th grade. My eyesight was getting worse and I remember that in the first half of the year I felt shy wearing glasses. I thought they would say "Hey, look yonder! There is a four-eyes!" and all the stuff like that. Eventually, I was lucky to have friends who hadn't even noticed the glasses.
The years rolled by and contact-lenses eventually came to our town. I got used to fitting in the lenses after two* weeks and then I did it regularly. To be fair, not everyone around me knew that I had bad eyesight and moreover I didn't know it either. Sometimes I forgot to take out my lenses when I fell asleep and by next morning my eyes were completely red. My eyesight was going gradually and inevitably down because of careless behaviour.
Some people had already had an operation on their eyesight and felt satisfied with it. I thought I might as well do the same. Doctors checked my health and soon I had one. Two weeks passed and my visual acuity returned.
It is known that the human eye can see several million pixels. Any device is far away from this value. What I am eager to say, writing this note, is that we need to be thoroughly careful about our health. Your eyesight is not only your ability to see; it also defines the quality of your life.
*First paragraph, only:- Your version is also very good English, but in a scholarly essay, 'people', 'we' ... are discouraged, and the talk is more in the passive voice: There are... It has been found that... . The rest of your paragraphs are personal, so it is ok to speak of 'I', 'we' etc.
*or, putting on the lenses...
Very well written!
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