A Hiking Trip
Today,we had a hiking trip.
There're several mountains around our home. When the weather is fine, we like to climb the mountains. It took about three hours to finish the hiking trip. The pine trees are grey. It seems that the Spring is far away. My son likes to play with the kids we met in the mountain. Some kids are friendly, some kids are cold. Most Chinese kids are the only one in their family. They want to have other playmate.
Next time, we'll choose a new route. There is a underground tunnel in the mountain at south of our home. It'll be a small adventure.
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A Hiking Trip
Today, we had went on a hiking trip.There're several mountains around our home. When the weather is fine, we like to climb the mountains. It took about three hours to finish the hiking trip. The pine trees are were grey. It seems that the spring is far away. My son liked to play with the kids we met in on the mountain. Some kids are were friendly, some kids were are cold. Most Chinese kids are the only ones in their family. They want to have another other playmate.
Next time, we'll choose a new route. There is a an underground tunnel in the mountain at south of our home. It'll be a small adventure.
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Hi Kathy, great writing. I made some small changes, mostly to do with tense agreement. When recounting a story, we generally use the narrative past tenses as the events that are being recounted are finished and took place at a definite time in the past. Your story was well structured and provided an interesting window on your home and culture, so keep writing!
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