Informal letter (please correct me)
Hi Alex,
How are you? Thanks for your letter and congratulations on passing your exam! It was such a good news that my mother wants to give you a present.
Regarding your questions, it's recommended that you spend your money on getting some clothes. You have already got a lot of computer games and besides, you know that you time is currently very limited to throw it away. Apart from that, there will be several discounts in most shops next week so, I'd try taking advantage of this situation if I were you.
In my opinion "Jack and Jones" is a good shop and I saw some very nice jeans and jackets last week. You should take a look and try on some of them.
I really look forward to hearing from you and your choice.
Best wishes,
Victor.
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Informal letter (please correct me)
Hi Alex,How are you? Thanks for your letter, and congratulations on passing your exam! It was such good news that my mother wants to give you a present.
Regarding your questions, it's recommended that you spend your money on getting some clothes. You have already got a lot of computer games, and besides, you know that your time is currently very limited to throw it away. Apart from that, there will be several discounts in most shops next week, so I'd try taking advantage of this situation if I were you.
In my opinion "Jack and Jones" is a good shop, and I saw some very nice jeans and jackets last week. You should take a look and try on some of them.
I really look forward to hearing from you about your choice.
Best wishes,
Victor.
Remember that any conjunction (but, and, so, yet, nor, for, or) must be preceded by a comma if it separates two complete clauses. So "jeans and jackets" does not require the comma, but the second sentence, where you say "Thanks for your letter" does.
The final closing sentence is awkward to readers, since we are likely to apply the "hearing from" to both "you" and "your choice". One sounds correct but the other is very wrong. Sometimes it's better to break things into separate sentences or connect them if they are too different for a list.
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Informal letter (please correct me)
Hi Alex,How are you? Thanks for your letter and congratulations on passing your exam! It was such a good news that my mother wants to give you a present.
Regarding your questions, it's recommended that you spend your money on getting some clothes. You have already got a lot of computer games and besides, you know that your time is currently very limited to throw it away. Apart from that, there will be several discounts in most shops next week, so I'd try taking advantage of this situation if I were you.
In my opinion "Jack and Jones" is a good shop and I saw some very nice jeans and jackets last week. You should take a look and try on some of them.
I really look forward to hearing from you and your choice.
Best wishes,
Victor.
Excellent!
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Thanks Moniquea!
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"It was such a good news" leave out the "a" to make it flow easier. Also "you know that you time is..." change it to "your time" for correct English.
But well done, this is an excellent letter.
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