Text for ielts (259 words)
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i would like to know what level do you think the writing task would get in ielts:
The question is:
Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole.
My answer:
Nowadays people debate to what scale our lifestyle is dangerous for the environment
and how we can prevent to create irreversible damages to the earth and to our health. For that reason some people decided to stop eating meat
and fish at all. In this article i will provide
some arguments for and against eating meat and fish.
Eating meat and fish provides us with many nutritions that are hard to find in the nature such as iron or vitamin b12.
Missing these vital vitamins can lead to disfunctional organs and also in some cases death. Some cultures such as the inuits
had no other choices than eating fish because there were no natural resources or places to grow food.
As for the positive aspects of avoiding eating meat and fish, one is the reduction of the extinction of rare species due to the
destruction of their environment. There are many places in the world, especially in the amazonas, where huge places of forests were
destroyed only for the reason of having more food places for animals such as cows and pigs.
Studies also show that there was no time in human history before where humans ate so much meat than today. This exorbitary
meat consumption is also bad to our health and leads to more strokes and a lower lifespan.
Overall i think that it benefits humans aswell as animals to reduce our meat consumption. Due to the positive aspects of eating
meat and fish a limited consumption seems reasonable.
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Text for ielts (259 words)
Hi,i would like to know what level do you think the writing task would get in ielts:
The question is:
Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole.
My answer:
Nowadays people debate to what scale our lifestyle is dangerous for to the environment
and how we can prevent to create irreversible damages to the earth and to our health. For that reason some people decided to stop eating meat
and fish at all All together. In this article i will provide
some arguments for and against eating meat and fish.
Eating meat and fish provides us with many nutritions nutrients that are hard to find in the nature such as iron or vitamin b12.
Missing these vital vitamins can lead to disfunctional organs and also, in some cases, death. Some cultures such as the inuits
had have no other choices than to eating fish because there were no natural resources or places to grow food.
As for the positive aspects of avoiding eating meat and fish, one is the reduction of the extinction of rare species due to the
destruction of their environment. There are many places in the world, especially in the amazonas, where huge places of forests were
destroyed only for the reason of having more food places for animals such as cows and pigs.
Studies also show that there was no time in human history before where humans ate so as much meat than as today. This exorbitary
excessive meat consumption is also bad to for our health and leads to more strokes and a lower shorter lifespan.
Overall i think that it benefits humans as well as animals to reduce our meat consumption. Due to the positive aspects of eating
meat and fish a limited consumption seems reasonable.
Very good. In truth I am not familiar with ielts but most of you mistakes where what native speakers would make as well (for example commas and tense shifts). It's always a good idea to use the same tense rather than switching between multiple. This just makes the text more pleasant to read.
Be sure not to use redundant words or phrases.
"prevent to create irreversible damages" and "human history before where humans"
Other than that it was very good. Again these are mistake that native speakers often make.
Best of luck!
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