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The IELTS writing patce /*Academic Writing Task 1: You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.*/ Answer: Obviously,the chart shows that the trends of proportion in USA and Sweden are similar .They both basically keep growing from 1940 to 2040 .There is still a difference between 1980 to 2020 .In USA,the proportion keeps stable at about 15% and incline after that time. In contrast to USA,the proportion in Sweden has more changes .It goes high from 15 to 20 around 2000 and then decline . On the other side,the proportion in Japan is more different from the previous two .Before about 2030,the trend of proportion looks like a up-ward curve .The proportion never goes over 10%.But starting from 2030 ,the line of proportion goes so high ,which is even over the other two counties . In my opinion,I think It shows that the most of the advanced countries in the world will follow the trend in this chart in the future .Since these three countries present the three mature figure of Asian, Europe and ,American .They will also need to solve the aged problem in a few years .

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IELTS writing practice

/*Academic Writing Task 1:
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.
The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.*/

Answer:

Obviously,the chart shows that the trends of proportions in the USA and Sweden are similar. They both basically keep growing from 1940 to 2040 .There is still a difference between 1980 to 2020. In the USA, the proportion keeps stable at about 15% and increases after that time. In contrast to USA,the proportion in Sweden has more changes .It goes high from 15 to 20 around 2000 and then declines .
On the other side,the proportion in Japan is different from the previous two. Before about 2030, the trend of proportion looks like an  upward curve. The proportion never goes over 10%. But starting from 2030, the line of proportion goes so high, which is even over the other two countries .
In my opinion, I think It shows that the most of the advanced countries in the world will follow the trend in this chart in the future. Since these three countries present the three mature figures of Asia, Europe and America. They will also need to solve the age problem in a few years.

Hello Marshall,

The reporting of the actual data is not bad, you have pointed out the main features of the graph. However the first paragraph should be a description/overview of the graph and you should not give your opinion - it is not asked for. Be careful with full stops and commas - they should have a space after them, not before.

Best wishes


Bob

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