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A roaring successing sportwoman: Billie Jean King Object: Write a competition entry about one great sportsperson that you'd include in a TV program about sport. Entry: In my opinion, playing a game or doing a sport doesn't mean just win medals or take up sport challenges. One of the most inspiring sportperson that I would definetely mention in a TV program is the retired tennis player Billie J. King. The american athlet, not only was an outstanding player, but also a fighter for the womens' rights and a symbol for the LGBT sportpeople. During her career, she won 197 matches at the Grand Slam competitions and 39 titles, and she respresented the US in internation competitions such as Federation Cup. At the same time she's considered as a pioneer of the womens' rights in tennis, especially because of the huge success she achieved in the so-called Battle of the Sexes, a tennis match played in 1973 against Bobby Riggs, who had earlier despised female tennis. Yet, she supported the rising of the first female professional tennis competition, in the late 1970s. Finally, Billie J. King was the first athlet who came out ot the closet, in the 1980s, receiving several credits by LGBT associations and being chosen as the USA delegate at the Sochi Olimpic Games in 2014. Nevertheless she has been a vegetarian for many years, proving that everybody can meet with success no matter the diety choises.

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A roaring successful sportswoman: Billie Jean King

Object: Write a competition entry about one great sportsperson that you'd include in a TV program about sports.

Entry: In my opinion, playing a game or doing (you only need: playing a game or sport  since they use the same action) a sport doesn't mean just winning medals or take taking up sport challenges. One of the most inspiring sportperson ( athletes is more commonly used)that I would definetely mention in for a TV program is the retired tennis player Billie J. King.

The american athlete was not only was an outstanding player, but also a fighter for the women's rights and a symbol for the other LGBT sportpeople. (athletes)

During her career, she won 197 matches at the Grand Slam competitions and 39 titles, and she respresented the US in international competitions such as the Federation Cup.
At the same time she's considered as a pioneer of the women's rights in tennis, especially because of the huge success she achieved in the so-called Battle of the Sexes, a tennis match played in 1973 against Bobby Riggs, who had earlier earlier had despised female tennis players. Yet, she supported the rising creation of the first female professional tennis competition, in the late 1970s.

Finally, Billie J. King was the first athlete who came out of the closet, in the 1980s, receiving several credits by LGBT associations and being was chosen as the USA delegate at the Sochi Olympic Games in 2014. Nevertheless (Nevertheless would indicate you are contrasting or referring to some previous thought) She has been a vegetarian for many years, proving that everybody can meet with success no matter the diety choises.their dietary choices.

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A roaring successful sportswoman (athlete): Billie Jean King

Objective: Write a competition entry about one great sportsperson that you'd include in a TV program about sport.

Entry: In my opinion, playing a game or doing a sport doesn't mean just winning medals or taking up sport challenges. One of the most inspiring sportperson (athletes)  that I would definetely mention in a TV program, is the retired tennis player Billie J. King.

The american athlete, not only was an outstanding player, but also a fighter for the womens' rights and a symbol for the LGBT sportpeople.

During her career, she won 197 matches at the Grand Slam competitions and 39 titles. She respresented the US in international competitions such as theFederation Cup.
At the same time she's considered as a pioneer of the womens' rights in tennis, especially because of the huge success she achieved in the so-called Battle of the Sexes, a tennis match played in 1973 against Bobby Riggs, who had earlier despised female tennis. (Yet), she supported the rising of the first female professional tennis competition, in the late 1970s.

Finally, Billie J. King was the first athlete who came out ot the closet, in the 1980s, receiving several credits (much acclaim)  by LGBT associations, and being chosen as the USA delegate at the Sochi Olimpic Games in 2014. Nevertheless she has been a vegetarian for many years, proving that everybody can meet with success (be successful) no matter what their diety choises (choices).

Dear Nicholas,  Good job!  I corrected some spelling, grammar, and word choice.  I am a big sports fan and hope that you post something again very soon.  

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