Nasty women on bord
I came back from London by air lase week.
After the landing on the Haneda air port, while I was making my way on the aisle to the exit, I encountered the unbelievable scene. I sew two Japanese women, who were around 70's, picking some
amenity goods unused for the business class passengers on their way to exit. I was too surprised to catch the burglars red-handed. They gathered more than ten. I thought they were shame of Japanese.
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Nasty women on board
I came back from London by air last week.After the landing at Haneda airport, while I was making my way down the aisle [or "corridors"?] to the exit, I encountered an unbelievable scene. I saw two Japanese women, who were around 70,[or "who were in their 70s"] picking up some
amenity goods left behind by business class passengers on their way to the exit [you might want to move "on their way to the exit" earlier in the sentence so that we know that it relates to the ladies and not to the business class passengers]. I was too surprised to catch the burglars red-handed. They gathered [or "snagged" if you want to be very colloqiual :)] more than ten items. They were bringing shame on Japanese people.
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Nasty women on bord board
I came back from London by air lase last week. After the landing on at the Haneda air port airport, while I was making my way on the aisle to the exit, I encountered witnessed the an unbelievable scene. I sew saw two Japanese women, who were around in their 70's 70s picking up some unused amenity amenities goods unused meant for the business class passengers on their way to the exit. I was too surprised to catch the burglars red-handed. They gathered more than ten altogether. I thought they were brought shame of to the Japanese.The part I highlighted in green seems to place emphasis on the landing. It's not needed since the topic of the sentence is you witnessing the unbelievable scene.
The part I highlighted in orange, it is correct but I'd reword it as "I witnessed an unbelievable scene while making my way to the exit". It feels more natural.
The part I highlighted in pink, is just to show that I replaced "amenity goods" with "amenities".
The part I highlighted in cyan/light blue, I'd reword it as "I feel that they're bringing shame to the Japanese".
Good luck and don't give up! :)
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Nasty women on board
I came back from London by air last week.After landing at Haneda air port, when I was making my way on aisles to exit, I encountered the unbelievable scene. I saw two Japanese women, who were around 70's, picking some
unused amenity goods form the business class passengers on their way to exit. I was too surprised to catch a burglar red-handed. They gathered more than ten items. I thought they were ashamed Japanese.
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Nasty women board
I flew back from London last week.After the landing at Haneda airport, while I was making my way through the aisle to the exit, I encountered the unbelievable scene. I saw two Japanese women, who were around 70's, taking some unused
amenity goods reserved for business class passengers on their way off the plane. I was too surprised to react to the thefts. They stole more than ten. I felt shame on behalf of all Japanese.
Hello.
Well done!
I would say "flew" because it says you traveled by plane.
Since you caught them "red handed", as in you caught them/saw them actually doing the act, I would rather use the word "react" which means to do something about what you saw.
You can say you felt shame, because it is an emotion.
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