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A letter Write a letter to your friend telling him/her that you have won a photography competition. In your letter – Describe the event. – Describe the photograph you have sent for the competition. – Invite him/her to the exhibition where your photograph is presented. Dear John, I'm very glad to tell you that I've won "the nicest photograph competition", held/sponsored by the local council each year. This competition started five years ago, aiming to work up public enthusiasm for photography. It's said that there were only no more than one hundred entered for it for the first time, yet it's been getting more and more popular, with nearly ten thousand participants this year. Each of us is allowed to submit three pictures at most. The only one picture I sent was taken this summer when my family and I took a tourist trip to the beach in a coastal city. In it, I'm teaching my six-year-old boy how to swim. I'm so dedicated, while he seems absolutely exhilarated. Clearly, this picture focuses on the responsibility and joys of fatherhood. I'm very happy that all the pictures, including mine, are going to be displayed in our town hall during the upcoming National Day holiday. Why not pay a visit to it during the holiday? I'm sure the pictures won't let you down and you will be deeply impressed. But if you have other plans, you can also take a close look at those pictures online after the exhibition. Lots of love, best wishes, Jim

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A letter

Write a letter to your friend telling him/her that you have won a photography competition. In your letter
– Describe the event.
– Describe the photograph you have sent for the competition.
– Invite him/her to the exhibition where your photograph is presented.

Dear John,
I'm very glad to tell you that I've won "the nicest photograph competition" the Nicest Photography Competition, held and sponsored by the local council each year. This competition started five years ago, aiming to work up public enthusiasm for photography. It's said that there were only no more than one hundred entered entries for it for the first time, yet but it's been getting more and more popular, with nearly ten thousand participants this year. Each of us is allowed to submit three pictures at most.
The only one picture I sent was taken this summer when my family and I took a tourist trip to the beach in a coastal city. In it, I'm teaching my six-year-old boy how to swim. I'm so dedicated, while he seems absolutely exhilarated. Clearly, this picture focuses on the responsibility responsibilities and joys of fatherhood.
I'm very happy that all the pictures, including mine, are going to be displayed in our town hall during the upcoming National Day holiday. Why not pay a visit to it during the holiday? I'm sure the pictures won't let you down and you will be deeply impressed. But if you have other plans, you can also take a close look at those pictures online after the exhibition.

Lots of love, best wishes,
Jim

In the first sentence, we don't usually place quotation marks for the names of awards. I think it's because it's become a noun. In this example, it is now a special noun with a formal name that you can perform a verb on. In this case, the verb is to win. That's why we say a certain person won a Grammy, or an Oscar, etc. But we wouldn't call it a "Grammy" or an "Oscar."

After that, it is important to note that to be held and to be sponsored can be two different things. In casual dialogue, if you said something was "held/sponsored," it's completely okay but it just means that the event was BOTH held AND sponsored by the same entity. Therefore, in writing, I think it flows better to differentiate. For example, "A baseball game was held at Apple Stadium and sponsored by Microsoft."

I took out the word tourist because you did not define a specific tourist attraction site that you visited. Therefore, it is enough to say you took a trip. This is also reinforced by "the beach in a coastal city." Since you did not name the coastal city, that means the coastal city is just a regular coastal city with a beach. It is not a famous tourist attraction site, so it's unnecessary to call it a tourist trip.

The last note is for the use of the word responsibilities. I changed it to plural form it's like saying you have only one responsibility and not multiple responsibilities as a father.

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