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Some people think that more money should be spent to promote the use of bicycles in cities. Others, however, believe that cities should focus on investing in public transport systems.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In response to hectic issues related to climate change and traffic congestion, various alternatives such as the use of bicycles and the extension of the public transport systems have been drawn lots of attentions. Some argue that authorities should invest more in the facilitation of the bicycle use, I personally believe that the development of public transport systems is more practical and effective solutions to the social issues.
There are a wide range of advantages in promoting the use of bicycle. When more individuals opt for bicycle to commute instead of energy-consuming vehicles, greenhouse gases emission may be significantly reduced and traffic congestion problem will be resolved. Encouraging people especially office workers or those who lives sedentary lifestyles to ride more bicycle also motivates the public to do more exercise and improve their health condition. If the demand for public transport reduces, this measure will may help taxpayers save up more than millions of dollars in the construction of public transport infrastructure.
However, I strongly advocate that the development of transport system should be the priority in most cities. Mass transit fulfils everyone’s needs regardless of their physical condition such as handicraft, sick or for those who want to transport goods or luggage. It is also much safer than riding bicycle in the main road. With train, light rail, ferry, it saves us lots of traffic time and gives us more convenience. Individuals can travel as far as they want because of the astonishingly fast speed of the public transport. In addition, people may not response to the bicycle campaign as much as the improvement of the transportation even if the government put in lots of resource to make the change, which mean lots of effort, time and money may be wasted.
In conclusion, I agree that the promotion of the bicycle use can contribute various benefits to our society, I strongly believe that policy maker should make a wise decision and put more money on the extension of the public transport system.
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Can anyone help mark my IELTS writing paper? Thanksss
Some people think that more money should be spent to promote the use of bicycles in cities. Others, however, believe that cities should focus on investing in public transport systems.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In response to hectic issues related to climate change and traffic congestion, various alternatives such as the use of bicycles and the extension of the public transport systems have drawn lots of attention. Some argue that authorities should invest more in the facilitation of bicycle use, I personally believe that the development of public transport systems is more a practical and effective solution to the social issues.
There are a wide range of advantages in promoting the use of bicycle. When more individuals opt for the bicycle to commute instead of energy-consuming vehicles, greenhouse gases emission may be significantly reduced and traffic congestion problems will be resolved. Encouraging people especially office workers or those who live sedentary lifestyles to ride their bicycle more also motivates the public to do more exercise and improve their health. If the demand for public transport reduces, this measure will may help taxpayers save more than millions of dollars in the construction of public transport infrastructure.
However, I strongly advocate that the development of transport system should be the priority in most cities. Mass transit fulfills everyone’s needs regardless of their physical condition such as handicap, sickness or for those who want to transport goods or luggage. It is also much safer than riding a bicycle on the main road. With train, light rail and ferry, it saves us lots of time and gives us more convenience. Individuals can travel as far as they want because of the astonishingly fast speed of the public transport. In addition, people may not respond to the bicycle campaign as much as the improvement of the transportation even if the government put in lots of resources to make the change, which mean lots of effort, time and money may be wasted.
In conclusion, while I agree that promotion of bicycle use can contribute various benefits to our society, I strongly believe that policy makers should make a wise decision and put more money into the extension of the public transport system.
Hello Kayla,
Nice essay, well laid out and some solid points made. A few mistakes with articles but nothing to prevent the message being understood.
Best wishes
Bob
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Can anyone help mark my IELTS writing paper? Thanksss
Some people think that more money should be spent to promote the use of bicycles in cities. Others, however, believe that cities should focus on investing in public transport systems.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In response to hectic issues related to climate change and traffic congestion, various alternatives such as the use of bicycles and the extension of the public transport systems have been drawn lots of attentions. Some argue that authorities should invest more in the facilitation of the bicycle use, I personally believe that the development of public transport systems is the more practical and effective solution to the this social issue.
There are a wide range of advantages in promoting the use of bicycles. When more individuals opt for to use a bicycle for commuting instead of using energy-consuming vehicles, greenhouse gases gas emissions may be significantly reduced and traffic congestion problems will be resolved. Encouraging people, especially office workers or those who live sedentary lifestyles, to ride more bicycles also motivates the public to do more exercise and improve their health condition. If the demand for public transport reduces, this measure will may help taxpayers save up more than millions of dollars in the construction of public transport infrastructure.
However, I strongly advocate that the development of transport systems should be the priority in most cities. Mass transit fulfils everyone’s needs regardless of their physical condition, such as handicraft, the sick or for those who want to transport goods or luggage. It is also much safer than riding a bicycle in the main road on busy sections of road. With new train, light rail and ferry infrastructure, commuters will save lots of time previously spent in traffic and give them greater convenience (I had to reword this sentence). Individuals can travel as far as they want because of the astonishingly fast speed of the public transport. In addition, people may not response respond to the bicycle campaign as much as the improvement of the transportation they would to the improvement of public transportation even if the government put in lots of resources to make the change, which means lots of effort, time and money may be wasted.
In conclusion, I agree that the promotion of the bicycle use can contribute various benefits to our society. However, I strongly believe that policy makers should make a wise decision and put more money on the extension of the public transport system.
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