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Interplanet Janet. Could anyone please help me out correcting mistakes? It's a short story. The Writing Prompt Interplanet Janet. You get to design your own planet: tell us all about your planet — the weather, the seasons, the inhabitants. Go. What an amazing task! I have always dreamed about my own house but a privately equipped planet in my complete disposal is far beyond my wildest expectations. My first thought was that I wanted it with an all year long summer but then I started to musing about how monotonously ideally boring it should be without comfy drizzling autumn rains, without crispy snow blanket in nippy wintry days, without spring thaw thrilling something innermost of our own. Therefore, let it be exactly with the same seasons and weather as we have on the Earth. And what about its presumable inhabitants? Should I invent new ‘all creatures small and great’, shouldn’t I? After thinking it over, I have finally decided that I cannot dream up more amazingly interesting animals, birds, reptiles, and insects than our Mother Nature have already done. And how about people? Does my brand-new world should be populated by these ape-descended life forms, which are so amazingly primitive that they still think iPhone watches are a pretty neat idea? Well, this decision should be carefully evaluated. Maybe before going to settle down on new planets, no matter completely made-up or existing ones, we must repair all we have done to our own. P.S. 'these ape-descended life forms, which are so amazingly primitive that they still think iPhone watches are a pretty neat idea' is a bit changed quote from The Hitchhiker's Guide to The Galaxy, don't change it please.

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Interplanet Janet. Could anyone please help me out correcting mistakes? It's a short story.

The Writing Prompt
Interplanet Janet. You get to design your own planet: tell us all about your planet — the weather, the seasons, the inhabitants. Go.

What an amazing task! I have always dreamed about my own house but a privately equipped planet at in my complete disposal is far beyond my wildest expectations.

My first thought was that I wanted it with an it to be summer all year around all year long summer but then I started to musing muse about how monotonous ly ideally boring it should could be without comfy drizzling autumn rains, without a crispy snow blanket in nippy wintry days and without spring thaw thrilling something innermost of our ownselves. Therefore, let it be have exactly with the same seasons and weathers as we have on the Earth.

And what about its presumable inhabitants?Shall i invent new creatures , making them all small and great (what do you mean with making them great?). Should i do that? Should I invent new ‘all creatures small and great’ After thinking it over, I have finally decided that I cannot dream up anything more amazingly interesting than the animals, birds, reptiles and insects thatn our Mother Nature has already created. have already done.

And how about people? Does my brand-new world should   need a population of these ape-descended life forms, which are so amazingly primitive that they still think iPhone watches are a pretty neat idea? Well, this decision should be carefully evaluated.

Maybe before going to settle down on new planets, no matter  if it is completely made-up or it already exists existing ones, we must repair all the damage we have done to our own planet. we have done to our own.

P.S. 'these ape-descended life forms, which are so amazingly primitive that they still think iPhone watches are a pretty neat idea' is a bit changed quote from The Hitchhiker's Guide to The Galaxy, don't change it please.

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