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We Should Aim for Excellence in Our Life Everyone knows that we should aim for excellence in our life. But in the real life, there are also many people who refuse to sweat for their future. They don't have any achievement after their efforts, so they begin to believe that they don't have the ability to success, and their aim is just an impossible dream. Even though, it's no doubt that we should aim for excellence in our life. I think it's the following reasons what result in failure. First, your efforts are not enough. People always want to achieve their goals in a short time. They desire for success excessively. Second, the ways and directions of your efforts are wrong. If you have a goal, you should know how to achieve it. For instance, if you want to cut a tree, you should have an axe first. At last, maybe your goal is too big. Big goals are often hard to achieve. We should divide our big goals in some small goals, and then follow them step by step. To sum up, if you don't do anything for your dream today, you will also the one who you were yesterday. You should aim for excellence in your life, only in this way can you be a better man tomorrow.

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All in all, this is very well written. I've just included a few corrections below that would take this from good to better.

We Should Aim for Excellence in Our Life Lives ("our" is plural so there are multiple lives)

Everyone knows that we should aim for excellence in our life lives. But in the real life, there are also many people who refuse to sweat for their future. They don't have any achievement after achieve anything from their efforts, so they begin to believe that they don't have the ability to success succeed, and their aim is just an impossible dream. Even though so, it's there's no doubt that we should aim for excellence in our life (sometimes it's good to reword so it doesn't become too repetitive). I think it's the following reasons what result in failure.

Firstly, your efforts are not enough. People always want to achieve their goals in a short time. They desire for success excessively. (Either "Their desire to succeed is excessive." or "They desire excessive success." One focuses on the noun "success" and the other focuses on the verb "succeed") Secondly, the ways and directions of your efforts are wrong. (< Sounds a little funny. I would recommend "Secondly, you may be working in the wrong way or in the wrong direction.")  If you have a goal, you should know how to achieve it. For instance, if you want to cut a tree, you should have an axe first. At Lastly, maybe your goal is too big. Big goals are often hard to achieve. We should divide our big goals into some small goals, and then follow them step by step.

To sum up, if you don't do anything for your dream today, you will also always be the one same person who you were yesterday. You should aim for excellence in your life, o. Only in this way can you be a better man person tomorrow.

Keep up the good work!

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very good quote !
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I liked the title very much. In the end, you have summed up your opinion. I recalled a quote after reading your end paragraph. It says, "If you don't work hard now to realize your own dreams, you will end up working under someone to complete their own dreams."

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