Your child
My brother, my friend, my love; my dad
The only person who trust me, loves me, spoils me and could know all what i wish
I don't need to speak so much to express myself
Just a look in my eyes is enaugh that he know what iam thinking
Your child iam,
Spoils girl Moonia
I see fears in your eyes dad,
Do you worry i grow up ?
That the child inside to me be Killed ?
Or you are afraid of the bad destiny?
Bad people?
Darkening dawn?
Your child iam
So don't worry don't be sad,
I had enaugh experiences
I knew that is stupid to trust someone else
I knew that success is born after failure,
That best wealth is knowledge, pride, honor
Your child iam
So let me fall down
I'll do it and then get up
The way is too long
Killer like time
Scary like the dark
Let me get broken
And then i see a new day
Your child iam if my innocence is soon away
Your clean education remain
No place, no one no time could remove it
Your child iam
So don't worry
Trust me and...
:) it was hard to write it i hope i don't have many mistakes
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Your child
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My brother, my friend, my love, my dadThe only person who trusts me, loves me, spoils me and could know all what I wish
I don't need to speak so much to express myself
Just a looking in my eyes is enaugh enough so that he knows what I am thinking
Your child I am,
Spoils girl Moonia
I see fears in your eyes dad,
Do you worry I grow up ? (Are you scared of me growing up?)
That the child inside to of me be was killed ?
Or you are afraid of the bad destiny?
Bad people?
Darkening dawn?
Your child I am
So don't worry don't be sad,
I had enaugh enough experiences
I knew know that it is stupid to trust someone else
I knew know that success is born after failure,
That the best wealth is knowledge, pride, honor
Your child I am
So let me fall down
I'll do it and then get up
The way is too long
Killer like time (Time is like a killer)
Scary like the dark
Let me get broken (Let me break down)
And then I will see a new day
Your child I am,
If my innocence is soon away
Your clean education remains
No place, no one, no time could remove it
Your child I am
So don't worry
Trust me and...
:) it was hard to write it i hope i don't have many mistakes
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Danke liebe Liubowen :) <3
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Dein Vater müsste stolz darauf sein, dass er eine gute Tochter wie dich hat.
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Thanks Yuichi that You think its amazing :)
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Your poem shows how much you love your father. That's amazing!
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